Open Poetry #46 |
pantile of rosary |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
there beyond those momentary walls where we adjourned to some seclusion just to be our most secret selves away from the clattering of them those he and her pieces from chess that never seem to leave the board as if permanent residence maintains some sort of semi permanent guarantee that something will come around again and fit snugly into worn out nothing we agree we didn't have feelings this way and there was never more to it than skin wanting to make new grooves in another's but we didn't realize just how deep it went that itching below our tattooed surfaces we were pantographs before we were mirrors ________________ daark |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
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Your words never fail to take me to places I can only dream about...ebm |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Always a fresh metaphor... your mind is an amazing place, Dark... ~Amaryllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ebm, thank you for looking in _____________ ms amary' humble thanks ms it (mind) is a wanderland. |
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: This transported me easily back some 35 years when I once worked in the skyline of Chicago's towering buildings; looking down upon the traffic of peds and cabs... but you wowed it even better than that moment. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun, thanks lady friend, you bless me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
really enjoyed the last line... and spent some time thinking about how it tied the rest together... what it might say in and of itself... so I did some research and learned the pantographs were used in early recordings, while my own limited expierence with the word was an instrument used to copy or scale drawings and plans.. and I saw... how well the ending line fit.. truly enjoyed..and always learn from reading you.. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
oooooo~ lovely~~~have to love the references to chess and how players move and are tied to the strategies of love & war~ niiiice stuff, darkieee~~~
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cpat, thanks amigo...I did enjoy the machine of pantograph working at the duplication concept..evolving into pure mirror or "saming" I guess one could say...kind of where the poem started in my head. ______________ bb bel1e, thanks little one, I enjoyed your eyes here |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
DS, I think this deserves another look. Enjoyed the thoughts and metaphors. ~Sunkissed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks sunkissed...I appreciate your reviews |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
I loved that last line. Enjoyed. Kat >^..^< |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Another poetic creation of yours that becomes an event which carves itself deep into the mind. Your mind perceives the soul's depth and beauty I think and combines it amazingly well with natural sensuousness. Wonderful write. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms kat.. _________________ ms mar, thanks lady friend |
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