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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 2010-08-19 12:55 PM


Camouflage


I move from day to day without
A single qualm or distant doubt
That it is I who died that day,
The moment that you went away.

Though outward tears may seem controlled,
They never stop, if truth be told,
They build behind the smile I share
That sits upon the mask I wear.

They join the light behind my eyes,
Another thinly veiled disguise,
To blind the world from hurt that grows
Within this shell of mortal woes.


/Kit McCallum


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1 posted 2010-08-19 01:20 PM


Kit, ma'am...
your offering portrays I think the "face" so many put on loss..
the hurt doesn't really go away..we put the facade on top and rarely tell the truth underneath..

I enjoyed the talent..and understand the content... well done ma'am... well done...
always nice to read your offerings...

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-19-2010 02:30 PM).]

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2 posted 2010-08-19 04:51 PM


Sorrow so poignantly expressed.

Love,
Margherita

Nan
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3 posted 2010-08-19 05:29 PM


You do her proud, Kit
Love ya
Nan




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4 posted 2010-08-19 07:29 PM


Excellent, Kit! Very well done!
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5 posted 2010-08-19 08:23 PM


My type of poetry.
Enjoyed muchly.

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6 posted 2010-08-19 09:01 PM


This "camo" and "cameo" doesn't quite
fit the photo, my dear...

but of course, you writing always
perseveres.

...whether you need them, or not.


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7 posted 2010-08-20 03:21 AM


Overpowering saddness written very well, Kit.
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8 posted 2010-08-20 07:40 AM


Kit, your poetry flows like a nightgowned lady moving from room to room by candlelight.

Your emotions saturate every word and my thoughts are with you.

Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2010-08-20 08:25 AM


Thank you so much everyone for the lovely words and the kind thoughts.  They are like receiving a warm hug through cyber space, and I truly appreciate it.


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10 posted 2010-08-20 01:36 PM


    



I know the camouflage you wear,
I wear it too, and wouldn't dare
Remove it, as it hides my fears
Connection severed, causes tears.

The very best that we can do
Is turn to others for our glue.
I am thankful and I pray
I can turn to you - on any day.

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11 posted 2010-08-20 02:40 PM


~~ah, deeply felt~~~

         

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12 posted 2010-08-21 07:58 PM


Your poem has lingered with me since you posted it.  It's beautifully crafted and i,t even more beautifully, expresses the faces and emotions we too often hide.

Thank you, Kit.  Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Alison

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13 posted 2010-08-21 09:53 PM


fine writing...James
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14 posted 2010-08-26 10:25 AM


I really really like this.

-- Used to be rosepetals25 :) I never know what to say when I reply to a poem, so ignore the lameness!

Andrew Scott
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15 posted 2010-08-28 09:42 PM


I think we've all worn that mask a time or two. Well written in form and substance. Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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