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ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

0 posted 2010-08-13 04:21 AM

Vengeance says I
Revenge I seek
For such a bad lie
You say not a peep

You made me suffer, Why?
Your reasons are so weak
Explain to me, do try
You see I'm not so meek

You made me cry
So I'll make you weep
I want you to die
But your life you'll keep

Forgiveness says I
Relief I seek
I forgive the lie
Admittance you leak

Understanding I cry
Our eyes begin to seep
Communication is why
The key is to speak

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1 posted 2010-08-13 04:37 AM

Karen this was amazing.

Where would we be without communication?

Enjoyed this very much!
Richard xx

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ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
2 posted 2010-08-13 05:33 AM

Thank you Richy.
XX Kat >^..^<

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3 posted 2010-08-13 06:17 AM

A touche is in order, i think.
Nice job ; )

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4 posted 2010-08-13 06:44 AM

Interesting, and raises a smile.

Let the punishment fit the crime, not the societal status of perpetrator or victim. This, and also all that "Vengeance is Mine sayeth the Lord" stuff---which is, I daresay, as much to save the potential avenger from ruination as the person being sought for possibly-justified punishment.

You phrase it well, and I appreciate the use of a regular rhyming form which can be a challenge at times.

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5 posted 2010-08-13 07:01 AM

nicely said...
a powerful write poet..

Earl Brinkman
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6 posted 2010-08-13 07:29 AM

Yes revenge is not the answer but communication is the key.  If only everyone in this world would agree.  Sigh.  Nice form and rhyme thoughout.
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7 posted 2010-08-13 11:57 AM

katahdin - to communication is to live, to have revenge is to not... Well done...


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ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
8 posted 2010-08-14 07:46 PM

Nocturnal pulse - Yes you inspired me again

easy1 - thanks for the comments. Anyone who reads my poems will see that I'm into rhyming but I love all poetry.

cpat Hair, Earl Brinkman & Bill Charles - Thanks for taking the time to read my poems.
Kat >^..^<

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9 posted 2010-08-15 02:52 AM

Welcome to Pip!

We can't say it too often and you say it very well, dear Kat!


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10 posted 2010-08-15 03:05 AM

well done!
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11 posted 2010-08-28 11:54 AM

Powerful poem, dear Kat, I'm glad I decided to peruse the older poems.



Andrew Scott
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12 posted 2010-08-28 08:03 PM

The spoken word
Is the open road
To comprehension
Of the unknown

Your's was a worthy path to travel. Thanks.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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13 posted 2010-08-28 11:10 PM

Enjoyed the read here, my friend...

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