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| Open Poetry #46 |
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Night Shift |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
It's the time of half-dreams and muted static. I bat my eyes at sleep as we flit and trip through the early hours. A limbo lit by streelights and the promise of dawn. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Very good. Driving fatigued is not the pleasantest task. |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
This is a cool poem. It just goes to show that you can say a lot without saying a lot, if that makes any sense. I often find myself at this time of night/day (if I'm driving or just up) about the promise the day holds. I also wonder if I can make the most of that day before me. Very good. Regards, Novus_Os Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great write! Descriptive and powerful! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Nicely done.. great portrayal of that woozy up-all-night feeling.. I cannot tell if the subject is walking or driving yet it does not matter, since it is so very well-said  ~Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It's the time of half-dreams and muted static. very descriptive of the hour..and a strong begining to a concise poem.. well done... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Anya, So much imagery in brief emotion... all I can suggest as a critique would be to watch your spelling. Otherwise, wonderful! |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
I know this time a day all too well.....and the muted static can get pretty loud at times don't you think??? ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
anya - been there many times, nice write... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
"the promise of dawn" I love this tranquilizing conclusion, though probably it won't be witnessed ... as sleep will demand its righteous share. You really let me see and feel that particular atmosphere. Your words also brought memories in which I dwelled for a long moment. Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
Thank you Margherita. I do indeed see 'the promise of dawn' most days as I work nights and this was my musing on how it feels on a particularly slow evening! |
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