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martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-08-05 09:44 AM

and through the rose color tinted looking glass I can see
the infinite subconscious desires in all their complexitease

given time as that great prism
refined
focused
MAGNIFIED

out
for a drink with the girls
perhaps it was her plan
blowing off steam
another night... to b*tch about her man

maybe run in
to a foreign speaking "Dan",
the cheater on her, his "virtual" wife

but she hadn't seen it
expected it
perhaps
perplex-ted it

finding a good man, a good heart, a good character
with manly desires
for a fresh start

she could improve her English
get a better job
hope for a better living
a better life

(I was looking for
the "perfect" wife)

and so their friendship grew on
she would drop a phrase or two
into conversation
to lead him on

you would have done the same
keep the man on a hook
tease him a little
to make sure he looks

So the days went by
subconscious desires
feeding the fire

and the pins fell down
like a house of cards
dominoes spiraling around
and 'round

her English improved
she got a job
her man was JEALOUS
as time turned to sand

(and where does that leave me,
this English speaking, good charactered "Dan"
a friend? a lover? author? storyteller?)

her heart will mend

no matter what the outcome
it will all become history

it will all become
poetry

in the end

[This message has been edited by martiniat8 (08-05-2010 10:53 AM).]

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2010-08-05 10:26 AM

Ouch. Well-written and painful.

Finding a woman who is both noble and pretty is like trying to find the proverbial needle in a haystack. I am sure some women would have a similar complaint about men.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2010-08-06 12:37 PM

You and your storytelling poetry is amazing to me.
You present the human side of life, without glossing it over or making a fuss about pretty stuff.
I am intrigued by your style and how you lay it out there and come up with a fabulous poem

I've always been a fan and you never disappoint!!!

Good for you, martini man!!

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

3 posted 2010-08-06 07:06 AM

Thanks guys,
thanks Blues, I just write what I remember, how I see things

no real style or thought goes into it, I just write it like I hear it, see it, feel it

Nocturnal Pulse
Member

since 2010-08-12

Posts 84
Australia

4 posted 2010-08-12 08:46 AM

Thoroughly impressed, great job.

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

5 posted 2010-08-12 11:33 PM

I agree with Blues Serenade - I like your style!
Kat >^..^<

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