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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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An answer to our song..... I was crying the tears were yours and I thought it was supposed to be magic that I could wait the days watch as they slipped into years patiently awaiting your white horse but see I have this unnerving flaw Passion.... it burned and waited for you but it never got the answer it sought. Forgive me for my mishaps. they were more than mishaps but i was afraid that I was only an option for you. Excuses yes I know. As it turns out we both have them now. Now i find myself and you aging seeing us never get what we want because of things that get in the way like the future I want that you aren't ready to give because I've broken your trust your heart I know this...... But understand you broke my heart also I am crying and the tears belong to you to our broken dream to you the one who holds my soul in his grip. "Its gonna be alright cause I'm okay with me" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done ma'am... there is a raw honesty to these, and yet the reservation..the holding back as well that illustrates the control around emotions shared.. good stuff... |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Interesting write. Well-composed and effectively worded. As for content, i.e., the subject here, I suppose we can only relate to such words through our own (the reader's) personal experience. I have read a lot of laments from innocent victims of love, for sure, but also similar stuff from a few heinous murderers and other at-the-time undisciplined felons. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your poem stirs me, it is both passionate and deeply emotional. Nice to read you here again, Temptress~ |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Very powerful, very emotional, full of passion for love lost and futures failed. I bow to you and yours. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
soulblood oozing ms..enjoyed your pen |
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