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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2010-07-15 10:44 AM



maybe it was those dune day seductions
when you brought cherries and lipstick
and blushed at the voyeur who lingered

or the distant sighs of urgent tides
pressing into coves willing writhes
as if they were imitating our dancing

or those under the oak tree waterings
when you spoke of consuming sensations
and ruined the dry climate with saliva

leaving kiss texture gratification there
on the listening seams of my attention
before you called me such sexy names

unintentional and improper and quite often

______________

daark

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easy1
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1 posted 2010-07-15 12:33 PM


Very neatly composed... considering the subject. Great imagery here, and I can almost imagine the blurted names.

At least she saved them for you, and not for the beach-wandering old man with a camera, etc.

A good read---appreciated.

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2010-07-15 01:26 PM


thanks ez1...
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3 posted 2010-07-15 11:52 PM


D ~

I do like how you write it and I do like how I see it.

A

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2010-07-16 05:49 AM


ms ali-san, thanks babe
Sunshine
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5 posted 2010-07-16 04:17 PM


Last line was the lovely bow...




Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2010-07-16 05:29 PM


ms sun..thanks babe
Eusta B. Mae
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7 posted 2010-07-26 09:26 AM


You wet the imagination then wring out every delicious drop-EBM
Cpat Hair
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8 posted 2010-07-26 10:55 AM


"leaving kiss texture gratification there
on the listening seams of my attention"

very nice.......  

always a lesson when I read your offerings



Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2010-07-26 03:10 PM


ms ebm..thanks lady

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cpat, thank amigomyster..

katahdin
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10 posted 2010-07-26 07:20 PM


I like your style.
Kat >^..^<

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2010-07-27 06:04 AM


ms Kat..thanks so much
Earl Brinkman
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12 posted 2010-08-10 10:32 PM


I love that line `ruined the dry climax with saliva.  I guess I shouldn`t ruin this comment by saying too much - `Great`.
BluesSerenade
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13 posted 2010-08-10 10:55 PM


maybe it was those dune day seductions
when you brought cherries and lipstick
and blushed at the voyeur who lingered
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Maybe it was!!!

Hot dayummmmmmm!!!  

Dark Stranger
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14 posted 2010-08-11 05:48 AM


EB..thanks amigo

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babyblue..glad you found it babe..thanks

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