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My Finest Wine
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My Finest Wine |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Her fermentation leaves a fine bouquet To rest upon the palate like soft foreplay With intoxicating legs that flow so long She strolls the seducer’s harvest song Her full body flavor contained in curves Pours like an hourglass that so allures Surely she is the thirst I yearn to drink For none other’s glass do I crave to clink She is my finest wine And all she must do is breath |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done..... such wine should be savored and of course allowed to breathe... |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Definately sounds like a woman who could drive one to drink. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Very nicely done. Dry to the point of astringency, as I tend to prefer (in wines and wit, whenever possible). |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Pretty heady stuff, makes for a warm glow that's for sure. Really wonderful writing!! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Thank you one and all for stopping by. Your words are the coin of the realm and I am enriched by your offerings. Peace to you and yours. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Andrew my friend, this verse was a fine vintage indeed! I loved the wordplay, that is right up my alley. You had me at: "With intoxicating legs that flow so long She strolls the seducer’s harvest song" What a brilliant line! Outstanding writing! Richard  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...this is your finest hour...James |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Thanks Richy and James... your reads and writes are much appreciated. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very enticing, dear Andrew. Enjoyed it much. Love, Margherita |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wonderful to read.. I enjoyed this, great use of the AA/BB rhyme scheme, which isn`t usually my favorite, yet here you chose fresh rhyme and unique simile.. well done! ~Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
smiling here |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This went down so smoothly!  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
exquisite and beautiful, thanks for the well crafted write. yann |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Very well done and that last line was PERFECT. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Margherita: Glad you could be enticed. Thanks for the kindness, the read, and the write. Amaryllis: Your words are the coin of the realm. Thank you for spending them here. Passing Shadows: Thank you for casting your shade my way. It is my pleasure to bring a smile. Sunshine: I’m glad I could please the palate of one of PIP’s finest. Islander: Your adjectives are much appreciated. I bow to you and yours, in turn. Earl: Thank you for the PERFECT on that last line. I feel the same way… which is somewhat a rarity for me. TO ONE AND ALL… Thanks for all your time in reading and responding. It does a heart good. Peace! |
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