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lady of bending tree road
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lady of bending tree road |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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with that khaki dirt on your shoulders you could be a much more lovely highway if you just left less to the imagination men wouldn't sneak up on your curves and act surprised when you threw them down and used them like a rash to scratch lovers wouldn't pull off into your secrets and make secrets of their own so often like those you speak of to the windy mornings the proper girls wouldn't say you were edgy when they keep their bimmers away from knowing you lest you key their sides with slide stones but I couldn't love you if you were more lovely ___________ daark (the snake road "mulholland" down to the rock store) |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
"but I couldn't love you if you were more lovely" niiice~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
D, I've only been on a "bike" twice in my life and only on a short ride...we have those country highways here that would make it a pleasure to be on one again...if only. M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bb-bel1e, thannnnnks little one ______________ ms MMs..I imagine whoever you rode behind enjoyed the poetry on his back..thanks lady |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You and the road, you on the road, you spilling the secrets of the road so generously, wow! Fantastic job. Love, Margherita  |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
That second stanza is a nice stop on this road. |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
This drips cool. Nice work. Regards, Novus_Os |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*just shaking head and sighing* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend ________________ eb, thanks amigo _______________ nov' thank you ___________________ ms dixie, thanks babe |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I think I remember this from before.... and if not, it simply so familiar it seems that way... a memorable piece sir...and you personify well the road while playing with the metaphor...to be envied... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cpat...maybe you have been down this road a few times? thanks amigo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
could be sir... she sounds familiar and like any number of roads I have skirted past the slides and her narrow soulders to get to her beauty... anjoyed the piece...and the talent sir. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Yes, it's great to see the roads through your eyes. Your "Lady" sounds like a ride that shouldn't be missed. Ever been to Deals Gap or Cherohala Skyway? This poem reminded me so much of those sweeping curves and switch-backs. Nice lean-words you pen for us, D. Always. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms wood...thanks for the eyes lady..nice to see you dance by from time to time. This area is some of the old hollywood hills countryside with mulholland and decker and some of the other roads...one lane so narrow you can see your own tail lights on the curves. Have not visited the paths you speak of that I am aware of. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
great diction and imagery...very cool poem...i love it! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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