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hymn of stolen roses |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you were lovely how you rose there from the lipstick of the water like a butterfly from her cocoon but you arrived without struggle more angelic as if wings were expected and not just temporary adornments and your glances were enchantments wafting here and there under oak limbs perhaps they were secrets escaping or secrets being created for later on when you had on your look back hem barely covering those residue sensations and your voice was wordless as moan music _______________ daark |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Beautiful weave, Dark...I hope and wonder if all your readers take the time to notice the music within the words...your lovely sonics, embedded rhyme...not to mention the font of perpetual metaphor, never stale or re-run! You are amazing. A A pile of scribbles here: |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms a'mary..you bless me with your reads and comments..humble thanks lady!! |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Oh, I noticed the music within the words, Amaryllis. That is usually the case with daark. Another thing I noticed were the secrets. I seem to have opened a large can of secrets recently. I see quite a few poems dealing with the subject, and in fact a poem I wrote today, which wasn't supposed to be about secrets, just happened to veer into them. Love the hell out of the two words of the poem, "moan music." To mimic is a form of praise unless you have no thoughts of your own |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks JP, I appreciate your reviews |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and your glances were enchantments wafting here and there under oak limbs perhaps they were secrets escaping ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ D~ you have a way of unfolding the feelings, that newness, the unexpected and thrill of it all, and the beauty of a heart in flight. Happy New Year, slick stuff~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
what a beautiful trip! Love that last line and all the images leading up to it. What you see and sometimes never comment on is bewildering. Great work!! Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
There is something extremely sensual about rising like an angel born from water. Nothing asymetrical mars the reflection of perfection. And the kiss lingers...It's ethereal, something akin to a pheonix rising, but with decided feminity. I doubt this mystery could bear the weight of words, only the aura of livling revelations. Imagination scuplting loveliness. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Required several reads, which was a good thing in my mind. Those last four lines kept me coming back for more. Thanks for sharing. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue, thanks babe..and HNY to you too. ___________ ms kl, thanks lady friend for the depth of your reads, I do feel your eyes on the word sounds. ________________ eric, thanks amigo, I appreciate your reads. ________________ andrew, thanks guy for the reads and comments |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
okay, so now you have my permission to steal away just a little more this next year...  smooth soothe, sir... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...you make me crave veils...with wind behind them..thanks lady |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Beautiful. Did you know that I really like your poetry? Ali-san |
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