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Stolen Reverie |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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This altar of choice, not so uncomfortable now, is it? A fakir becomes enamored of his prickly mattress before long, and eiderdown is scorned for rows of rusted steel; knowing he can rise at any holy moment. So this stanchion narrow, hard confining, to facilitate feeding the young, you chose to twist your head obedient, there, didn`t you, so do not kick the pine slat bucket frothed with milk, it does no good. If neediness in liquid eyes still haunts, then duck behind the oil cloth, in the lambent sheen your shadow mimes a perfect mummer`s dance, charcoal against the almond and apricot screen, so there are your fifteen minutes, now, there is your quickening, your private halleluia, see how your tea rose smile ripens to carnelian, a flash, an eldritch fire transient, but oh so gratifying. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your unique style, dear Amaryllis, transforms every read into a poetic luxury event. The senses quiver. Love, Margherita  |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Real choices are good. You are a good vocabularian (vocabularist?). As for me, I have to look things up these days. Rose-to-Carmelian is wonderful imagery... I find your writing style here easy to appreciate, as always from what you have posted so far. The meaningful sentiments expressed in this work I believe I can understand: the need for attention, the emotional rut of ascetic (or otherwise) habit, the resignations that time can bring, along with wisdom... Perhaps the choice you speak of is whether to attribute these happenstances to the poet, the reader, or to both simultaneously? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
A fakir becomes enamored of his prickly mattress before long, and eiderdown is scorned for rows of rusted steel; knowing he can rise at any holy moment. very nice!... enjoyed the whole, but the passage above stuck out to me.. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Margherita! You are so kind to my words... . easy1..yes, once again, you`ve got it.. I should have titled this `Mona Lisa Smile`.. just an acknowlegement of the `space apart` we keep inside ourselves, even while contentedly being responsible, outwardly. . Thank you, Cpat H! It means a lot... . ~Amaryllis |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
"I listen so that I may decipher the mystery of myself and become more whole." Richard Moss Wow! Very daring, innovative, original, exotic... You have surpassed yourself. Bravo! |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Very intersting imagery and story throughout~ ~so much enjoyed~ |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
An interesting post my friend you have put a lot of thought into this. Take care. Lindsay |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
Very thoughtful, wisdom and inspiration flow freely in this. A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice to read you fantastic work! |
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