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Sunday in June
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Sunday in June |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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The air is warm with wood scent, lemon and linseed oil, perfumed by Sunday bodies cotton-pressed, smartly dressed- short sleeves and shining brows in the eye of June. . The congregation shifts, torpid in the heavy summer steam, the sermon lengthy, in rich baritone, with outdoor songbird sweet accompaniment. . Four-oclock sun slants from the rafters, gilds the honeyed altar, sings down upon the waiting clergy, as if they somehow planned it, this gloried spotlighting. . Outside, the Cherry nods, the bumblebee mutters to himself around the azalea, the red-tail hawk scrolls scrimshaw in the sky, heedless of the prayers below his wings. . My oldest boy, not quite thirteen sits near, yet far enough to stretch his individuality- he does not know I see how his eye obeys the blushing pull of the pretty brunette across the aisle. . My youngest wears his seven years so lightly I half-believe he is my baby still- sits beside me, drawing trucks and tanks intent, engrossed with everything, with now. . That evening, I can`t recall which scripture read- which uplifting words I should have kept, because I saw a sermon in the miracle of moments, in the small but infinite daily parables. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I always enjoy stories of life Gloom |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amaryllis... You have a marvelous touch at inviting the reader to sit right beside you. Excellent work, m'dear. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
My oldest boy, not quite thirteen sits near, yet far enough to stretch his individuality- he does not know I see how his eye obeys the blushing pull of the pretty brunette across the aisle. I love this. And I agree with Sunshine, you pull the reader into your poems, and take us with you, into your world, and through your eyes. Amazing. |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Nice. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
So, so, lovely Amaryllis. Just like you! Richard xx |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thankee kindly, all above-!  Wow I figured this poem would sink like a.. well, like a lead sinker =P lol Because I thought it may come off boring, to some.. but thanks so much to all, so glad it`s not! (hopefully) Best~Amaryllis |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Absolutely nothing boring about this poem! You blend in so many things together, so many stories, so many visions one absorbs the atmosphere as one absorbs the smell of a fine wine. It's a wonderful piece of writing and a beautiful snapshot of daily life.....very impressive!  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks, Mr. Balladeer!  That sure was nice to hear.. `specially from you~! =)Best~Amaryllis |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
Very good. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A very nicely well-drawn picture, and interesting for what was noted and what was omitted here. Except for the later hour, I almost believe I have been there, too. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
hot damn i just love your poetry |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Your descriptions of your sons was really quite detailed and I could imagine that I was sitting across from them. Thanks for sharing a moment in time. This is like a photograph. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am an official fan. I felt it, smelled it, danced it--the only thing I couldn't relate to was the nodding cherry. (But that's just my prob, eh?  ) I smelled starch, somewhere as well. Fabulous. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Many, many thanks to all above, for your kind words! . And Serenity.. I suppose you already know but I meant the nodding ornamental cherry trees, in the light wind.. maybe you don`t have many of them in the south? I`m not sure what trees are indigenous to the N.W or not, heh Thanks for the look-see & for smelling the starch! . Best~Amaryllis |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Armaryllis I would love to second Balladeer's summation of your great poem. It was a pleasure to read, thanks for sharing. Lindsay |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Amaryllis, This is a very well written piece. I like it. Love Bobby |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Nothing to add that has not been said, except if you have a book of poetry, can you direct me to it? You write like Rockwell paints. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Mysteria! No, darn it, no book... yet! I`m working on my dream.. soon, soon! Best~Amaryllis |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
And thank you, also, Lindsay & Bobby! . Best~Amaryllis [This message has been edited by Amaryllis (06-19-2010 03:34 AM).] |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
nice moment. yann |
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