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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Lingering on your lower lip Holding your kiss to mine We pause as fleeting Casual lips recaptured With insistence Gives attention to intent Of the interlocking That our love and desire Be so remembered And rekindled Upon our meeting or departing |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
for some reason this has an almost circular feel to it.. supported by the ending lines, it lets the reader take it where they will with hellos or goodbyes |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
comming or going...kissing like you mean it. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
one should I suppose... for a kiss of hello or of good bye is a moments time to express the heart inside the occasion.. I enjoyed ma'am.. thank you |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
The interlocking word sounds, as read or spoken, are a good device, especially given this subject, and are well-played here. Good stuff! The first line had me reminiscing already about (motion picture, of course) prurient teeth-on-lower-lip action. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
feels like a mirror eye view here..enjoyed it ms |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
easy1- thanks for the commentary and I'm glad you liked it. -------------------------------------------- D-Glad you enjoyed the feeling! eb |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"Casual lips recaptured With insistence" Love this line... JL  |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
 thank u my friend My respect Nourzihane [This message has been edited by Ron (08-31-2010 11:08 PM).] |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
JL-thanks, I liked it too! ebm ------------------------------------------- nourzihane- Way cool! Wish I would have thought to do some thing like that. Thanks! ebm |
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rosepetals36 Member
since 2010-07-09
Posts 137Pa |
I really like reading you When I sign in to look around I find myself looking for your name.If you haven't noticed, I liked -- Used to be rosepetals25 :) I never know what to say when I reply to a poem, so ignore the lameness! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
rosepetals36-What a great compliment,thanks so much for letting me know and I hope I don't disapoint in the future. emb |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Casual lips" hmmmm... beautiful turn of phrase nicely done ebm |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
Great! You just forgot the part about our teeth touching. (This message was edited to make EBM giggle). |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
I forgot the :---Hugs--------) Seeeee???????? |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
The Lady- thanks, I'm kinda fond of that one myself! ebm. -------------------------------------------- Sweet Daddy 38 (lol) xoxoxoxoxo! [This message has been edited by Eusta B. Mae (09-07-2010 12:39 PM).] |
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