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Foot Stuck in The Mud
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Foot Stuck in The Mud |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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Foot Stuck in The Mud Remember The wisp of crisp air Youth wasted with a sharp cocktail Was it not yesterday? The salty temptation Was like love, simple and clean We were young before And today we tell the stories Of our youth with zealous hearts Like tomorrow doesn't matter Like pretend old souls Who lived all that’s left... No wonder... I have my foot stuck in the mud -Juju -"So you found a girl Who thinks really deep thoughts What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos [This message has been edited by Juju (04-20-2010 10:01 PM).] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I like the feeling of this one. That first drink can lead to a very long sip. Just a heads up...you might want to check spelling. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
This was well written and clear. I think the subject matter is relevent. |
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