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twistedpup
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since 2011-02-25

Posts 115

0 posted 2011-02-25 06:02 PM

it happened like a snow fall
unexpected like usual
creating thoughts in dreams lastnight
you got me thinking
its like a twisted novel
with no real ending
watching you working
wondering what you're wondering
trying to figure out things
inside my head is a mess
you dont know this
keeping in step with every thing
just keep pretending
something we do best
the clock hand hits
time to leave
time for reality

*hugs*

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-02-25 06:58 PM

I think I'm going to enjoy reading you.
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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-02-25 09:53 PM

The title puzzled me, but the poem is first-rate. I like the kind of poetry that questions the night and everything in it.

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twistedpup
Member

since 2011-02-25

Posts 115

3 posted 2011-02-26 09:11 PM

thank you very much.

*hugs*

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2011-02-27 09:43 AM

"like a twisted novel
with no real ending"

...such an apt description of that dream-state world...nice write...enjoyed

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2011-02-28 09:22 AM

Welcome to Pip!

I enjoyed your first entry. Very nice.

Love,
Margherita

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2011-02-28 10:09 AM

Tough stuff!
It's a hard approach all the same with all the feelings involved.

Good writing!

Eric

the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog

twistedpup
Member

since 2011-02-25

Posts 115

7 posted 2011-02-28 11:53 AM

thank you all so much for your feedback!

Nareena
Member

since 2011-02-17

Posts 51
BC, Canada

8 posted 2011-02-28 02:06 PM

I enjoyed this very much... reminds me of the writing of someone I used to know very well

Welcome to PiP!

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

9 posted 2011-02-28 06:51 PM

Welcome to the blue room. I enjoyed your poem very much.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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10 posted 2011-03-05 01:04 AM

welcome to PIP!

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