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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-02-06 08:03 AM

The winter trees
huddled together
behind wire fences
Their bone
naked branches
in sullen colors
brought to mind
photos from
the Holocaust

LGR(C)2/5/11

[This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (02-06-2011 08:36 AM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-02-06 12:31 PM

Damn! Lori. You are putting out GREAT poetry lately. Concise. Shudderingly dramatic.

~ Some people are like a Slinky-not really good for anything, but you still can't help but smile when you shove them down the stairs. ~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2011-02-06 04:14 PM

Quite an emotional write, the starkness is bone chilling, if you will.

You conveyed so much with so few words, not an easy thing to do.

good work!!

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

3 posted 2011-02-06 04:34 PM

I've always admired "Naked" trees. Enjoyed.

-Trina
Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-02-06 09:16 PM

Thanks Jerry...uh..what's lately? Whatever it is I'm glad you really seem to like it.
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Thank you Blues for reminding me short is good.
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Trina- yes it does sound like you!

Thanks, Lori

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-02-06 09:22 PM

wow...that is quite a dramatic comparison...paints a powerful image...amazing write

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2011-02-06 11:38 PM

This is fantastic,

I love it.
A

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

7 posted 2011-02-06 11:41 PM

You really went in an interesting direction with this one Lori
However, that stark reality is a fitting comparison.

Good writing once again!

Eric

in a relationship the me becomes we.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

8 posted 2011-02-07 08:16 AM

Steaven-Your praise id very kind and generous, glad you liked this one.
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Alison-I'm delighted you said "fantastic"
comming from you that means alot.
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Thanks Eric, I'm glad you liked it too. I had my concerns about the piece but aparently I needn't have worried.

Lori

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