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In the Abyss
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In the Abyss |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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I'm falling into an abyss listening for the sound of your tingle forever and ever lost in your blues I'm consumed, depleted by whispers wrapped in a haunting quintessence I hear your breath, a soft hiss smell of cinnamon and ripe peaches relentless upon my deliberate the air around me shuddered pfff, you puffed air through your spread open and I once again shivered with coup de foudre as I tried to kiss your face off my chest heaving palpitations anticipating the heralding of you sinking deeper and deeper in squander for I am kissing blank held in a prison, wanting escapism freedom, free to hold flesh down to its root where is stored for safe keeping; intimacy trying to keep a lid on fear swimming in the murkiness of cimmerian reaching, grasping, hands searching sounds coming from my mouth distant cousin to a sob my voice echoes in my bluster I choke on gloom she is so beautiful it is hurtful flawless oh I smell cinnamon and ripe peaches she is close now she is here cradling my head on her breasts soothing words I'm here, I am here ©January 9, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Oh it so is like falling. When I read your poem, I felt the same mixture of feelings. You wove them in very well. avoir le coup de foudre; it is nothing short of breathtaking. Very nice  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
my voice echoes in my bluster "I choke on gloom she is so beautiful it is hurtful flawless oh I smell cinnamon and ripe peaches she is close now she is here cradling my head on her breasts soothing words I'm here, I am here" Superb writing, Jerry. I felt the need for the closeness... Enjoyed. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Breathtaking, it most certainly is, Nicole. You are a wonderful commenter and I thank you for you being here. <><> If closeness you felt as you read my poem, JL, that is the ultimate in praise. Thank you. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Your muse is taking you to new heights my friend, this is golden. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I have a good muse, that is a fact, Lori, but I also have fantastic inspiration which moves my fingers on the keyboard. Thank you for stopping by and commenting. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautiful in its longing, my friend. I know those words you speak of at the end can be magic. Glad to see the universe finally dripped some happiness near you. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Michael, appreciate the kind words . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~ |
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