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Through Wintry Footprints
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Through Wintry Footprints |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Through Wintry Footprints  Though the path is worn and old and dreamy vine clutters evergreen bold. I will not abandon that way despite the weeds and mossy mold… For though a short while I was with you your love pressed into and conquered my lonely-wounded soul… And still, to this wintry day, I am fascinated by your smile your thoughtfulness and passion in life, your adoring expression in love and insistent stance for kindness… What I ask, what did you perceive in me, and why would you have embraced such a fool as I? A con lurking about the days, for sweetness such as you… Me, idly peddling hours as trade behind fully closed curtains hiding the man with classless dreams of inventory for my own fantasies… Yet my heart knew and its pleadings I ignored, I fell. I would not regard your love although I knew it was there and I knew it was you… Oh dear heart, if I could hold you, just once more. One more time, wrapping my arms around you holding you tight, I know I would not be here… If I could only hear you whisper once more, you loved me, I would not be here on this cold winters evening, walking this pathway, thinking of you, and retracing frozen footprints in the snow… Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear JL, you bare your heart in this poignant write, it is beautifully written, it holds melancholy, with a touch of bitterness, but hope too seems to have its rightful place, next to the everpresent feeling of love. Margherita  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
So plaintive and so beautiful. Makes me want to walk along with you and just be on that path. A |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW! powerful but beautiful, I really enjoyed this Love is the life of the soul... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
JL, you sound like someone I know quite well in this poem, moi! We, I have discovered with no help for the great quote, are out own worst enemies. You have two choices in life: |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I read poems like this, and although I know it's true...I think of: "I hold it true, whate'er befall; I feel it, when I sorrow most; 'Tis better to have loved and lost Than never to have loved at all." And I kind of want to sock Sir Tennyson square in the mouth, for thinking it up. haha I said one time you should post more, but when you do, you don't pull any punches. This hurts my heart, JL. I love this: "For though a short while I was with you your love pressed into and conquered my lonely-wounded soul…" Bittersweet and beautiful |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Precious write that brought my heart to my throat. Read your final lines through misted eyes. Well done JL bless your heart. Lori |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Margherita – Thank you for your kind words, and yes love is ever-present. →→→→→→ Alison – I think I would better enjoy the walk with you there. Thank you!! →→→→→→ Tracie66 – Thank you for the nice reply!! →→→→→→ Jerry – I think you have a great point with this. Thank you sir. →→→→→→ Nicole – Thank you for your reply. Alfred Tennyson would probably chuckle at your reply and say that this is no tale as his: Sir Lancelot and Queen Guinevere, his “maiden spring upon the plain.” Thank you!! It’s always nice to get a reply from you!! →→→→→→ Lori – You always have something so nice to say. Thank you! Sorry for the misted eyes. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
JL...I really could relate to this poem and in my mind that makes it very very good. Thanks so much for sharing my friend.I especially loved the ending...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Paul, I am glad you could relate. Thank you sir for your kind reply. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This literally brought tears to my eyes. I wrote a poem not so very long ago about a lonely walk of missing, but after reading this, I'm glad I never posted those lines, for they lack the beautiful heartsqueeze that these give... You write the ache of longing so poignantly that even someone who's never known loss would feel a twinge... and those of us who know just want to hug you and sog your shoulders with our tears. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Ruth, you sure know how to make someone feel special. I thought a way to a man’s heart was through his stomach? Please post that poem of yours ‘about a lonely walk of missing‘ I bet it’s beautiful!! Thanks for your kind reply. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My friend, I can assure you that tummy thing is myth... or maybe it's just me. *S* But... you asked, you receive, you see I spoke the truth! LOL walk Walk with me in winter’s wood Telling me the things we would Be for each other if we could Be anything at all Let me hear your dearest dream Never fearing it will seem A fantasy that’s too extreme Or hope that is too small In murmured conversations We’ll share our aspirations Pretending that limitations Simply do not exist Matching steps and clasping hands Away from all life’s demands The looks we're sharing with our plans Are intimate as kiss Bare limbs bleak against the sky Cry of geese somewhere up high Pierce fantasy. Suddenly I Am out here on my own Smiles and sharing? Just pretend There is no one in attend And loneliness will never end Forever, I'm alone |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh, wow. Yours is much better than mine!! Please post this. It's a beauty!  "Bare limbs bleak against the sky Cry of geese somewhere up high Pierce fantasy. Suddenly I Am out here on my own" Love this verse! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this gave me goosebumps beautiful! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: This is a powerful piece, JL, cutting into the similiar path I tread. I was moved deeply with this one. Michael |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Passing, I am so glad you stopped in to read; I always enjoy your feedback. Thank you so much! ----- ----- Michael, this is a good thing, having commonality. We all have connections in our living. Thank you sir! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Another great poem, JL. You write for many and very well too if I may say so. Okay - sniff, sniff. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
You are too sweet, Helen! Thank you. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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