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EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2011-12-12 01:33 PM

In lieu of the norm
I give you my poem
in the seasonal wrappings

strung in the lights
of vowels and consonants
glittered with commas, in a
garland of adjectives,
the verbs in a singsong of the
heart's alliteration

may you always embrace
the first of the butterflies
and the final few wildflowers
the cycle between, as something
must yield to the greater days
coming

though our distance is vast
and we dance on the crosswinds
when the ice on the sycamore
has hardened your forest

may my words reach the core
of your frozen extremities
in lieu of tradition
may you cherish our moment.

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (12-13-2011 09:18 AM).]

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-12-12 01:39 PM

Ah . . .

"as something
must yield to the greater days
coming"

I see you are living up to your core of conviction as demonstrated in my poem "Manipulation."

In this poem you are appealing to the growing group which feel that this time of the year is much overdone and commercialized. At least that is my impression of it, and if so, a hat tip to ya.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

2 posted 2011-12-12 01:41 PM

Yes you got something there

The shopping madness is just getting to me

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2011-12-13 06:10 PM

The poem you gave has so many beautiful thoughts.
Enjoyed,
Ms. E

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2011-12-13 07:03 PM

Thank you for the poem, EmmaRose. Such a gift.
ida

[This message has been edited by Marchmadness (12-15-2011 03:12 AM).]

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2011-12-13 08:07 PM

Emma
I have been reading a lot of poetry today; This gift you have given me reminds me of why.

"strung in the lights
of vowels and consonants
glittered with commas, in a
garland of adjectives,
the verbs in a singsong of the
heart's alliteration"

That is the best structured stanza that I have read in a while.

"...a singsong of the
heart's alliteration"

indeed

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2011-12-14 04:45 PM

Thanks!!
Beautiful write and wonderful thought.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2011-12-15 05:15 PM

quote:
though our distance is vast
and we dance on the crosswinds
when the ice on the sycamore
has hardened your forest

may my words reach the core
of your frozen extremities
in lieu of tradition
may you cherish our moment.

Such an intensely beautiful gift of your spirit, dear EmmaRose.

Love,
Margherita

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

8 posted 2011-12-15 07:50 PM

thanks everyone for stopping by

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2011-12-17 03:07 AM

What a wonderful gift, Emma Rose! Of course, I could be quite wrong, but I saw this as a poem to an individual who is far away from you and lives in much colder climes than yours. I saw it not as a negation of the negative aspect of Christmas, but as an affirmation of the positive spirit of Christmas.

I am very fortunate that, even if lack of finances didn't force me and what little family I have, to keep it simple, I have always embraced the true spirit of Christmas and I haven't allowed anybody or anything to make me think differently. In more affluent times, the gifts were more and bigger and how they were wrapped and with matching paper and ribbons mattered, but never to the exclusion of the core thought that Christmas is about the joyous celebration of Christ's birth.

Owl

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

10 posted 2011-12-17 08:05 AM

thank you Owl for seeing this

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2011-12-23 02:53 AM

Nice...James

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

12 posted 2011-12-27 01:14 AM

*sigh* a gorgeous render, loved it!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2011-12-27 09:57 AM

may you always embrace
the first of the butterflies
and the final few wildflowers

What a beautiful gift your poem is... a gift from the heart is priceless! *S*

luminosity
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since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

14 posted 2011-12-28 01:44 PM

ah, I have not smiled much lately...but this does so make me smile...... thank you

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