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Open Poetry #47

Dawn's Light

Just_little_Old_Me
Junior Member

since 2011-11-24

Posts 40
Roermond, The Netherlands

0 posted 2011-12-04 06:25 AM

Shimmering colours vividly
The Alchemist paints
Bringer of the dawn's light
Risen on wings of fiery hope
A kaleidoscope
Of red, gold and pink
Surreal the scene
To mere mortal eyes
Picture perfect are the skies
When the pale moon
Is cast away
For the morning sun to rise...

Like Night needs Day
Good needs Evil
I need you to be complete...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-12-04 07:11 AM

Nice wordplay. Nice grouping, and visually exciting.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

2 posted 2011-12-04 08:19 AM

Jean-Phillippe...Really enjoyed reading.
Take care and let your poetry flow like the rivers of the world...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

3 posted 2011-12-04 10:26 AM

It is hard to capture the enthrall of watching the dawn, that first light, but you have done so here beautifully.

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2011-12-04 11:10 AM

Your flow of words compliment the theme very nicely..and I do like the theme..
enjoyed

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

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