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Open Poetry #47

Into the Night

Just_little_Old_Me
Junior Member

since 2011-11-24

Posts 40
Roermond, The Netherlands

0 posted 2011-11-26 07:38 AM

Like black coffee swirling
The descent into the abyss
Voices ring out clearly
Yet they are not my own
The cries of mortal depressions
Embraced with a pain darkly
Chains of emotions entwining
All naught but just for me
Drenched in sweet sorrow
Walk the plains of everyday life
Like the setting sun
Becomes undone
I will go gentle into the night...

Like Night needs Day
Good needs Evil
I need you to be complete...

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

1 posted 2011-12-01 06:06 PM

Jean-Phillippe...I do believe you have made me into a fan of yours. I really enjoy your style of writting, It resembles the way I use to write, sort of dark, but your poems tell a story which I like. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2011-12-02 06:41 AM

Very intense.

Margherita

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2011-12-02 08:10 AM

"Do not go gentle into that good night; Old age should burn and rage at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
~Dylan Thomas.

Your last line implies a giving in?
"Like the setting sun
Becomes undone
I will go gentle into the night..."

An antithesis in your feelings?

Excellent poetry.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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