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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2011-11-15 02:50 AM


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Play a slow tune
On the violin
Let the tin whistle
Join in soft lament

In a new dream
My first love
And long dead father
Both beckon in the night

And I am
A young man
Once again
Speaking thinking
In an idiom
As hardly knows regret

Who feels them go
To from where they came
Without my as yet following

That lambent
Traceless shadow land
Not found on any map


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© Copyright 2011 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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1 posted 2011-11-15 04:40 AM


this is divine, thanks for sharing this well penned piece

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        — W. E. Channing



ice
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since 2003-05-17
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2 posted 2011-11-15 05:54 PM


Excellent
JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
3 posted 2011-11-15 09:52 PM


"And I am
A young man
Once again
Speaking thinking
In an idiom
As hardly knows regret"

This has got to be one of your best.
Love this verse.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
4 posted 2011-11-16 08:51 AM


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Thank you all

My best come to me
asking only to be written down

Thanks again


John


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Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2011-11-17 02:40 AM


This is truly one of your very best, John.
                                  Ida

ken206573
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6 posted 2011-11-17 11:25 AM


Your poetry speaks well each and every line. Simply enjoyed.
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
7 posted 2011-11-20 06:32 AM


Melancholic beauty.

Very enjoyable, with the only difference that I would make within my heart's perception ... the shadow land would be the land flooded with light. But the mystery makes it indeed "waiting in the shadows" ...

Margherita

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