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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-10-04 10:16 PM

Illogical and pointless
worthless lines of prose and poetry
mishmashed together with dutiful
coordinated reverence
for the shortrun

Given the poetical responsibility
the slowwalk to the greater power
is akin to walking in ankledeep
hot burning sand
your senses tantalized with camel dung

The truth of the telling is everything
as your philistine phrases devour each other
chafing bloody tendrils of
seething discontentment
like a cinematic trail of tears bearing witness

There is no remedy
for words writ and tasted
found undeserving and hollow
no cure for unsanctified
unnecessary wordplay to a lesser god

We all would be poets, though poems can lie
we bury our souls in the cackle and spit of the flame

©October 4, 2011 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-10-05 06:22 AM

intensely written! Well said!
Good morning Jerry!
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-10-05 06:34 AM

Good morning, Lori. Thank you.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2011-10-05 01:13 PM

Wow, Jp... this one sure grabs you where you might not like being grabbed. Awesome depiction and a powerful, powerful truth behind it.

quote:
There is no remedy
for words writ and tasted
found undeserving and hollow
no cure for unsanctified
unnecessary wordplay to a lesser god

Ouch!

well done.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-10-05 03:02 PM

Much appreciated comments, Michael, thank you.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-10-06 01:44 PM

I like and concur.

Owl

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2011-10-06 08:37 PM

You capture well the driven nature of poets... writing because they must.

Very intense and very well done!

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

7 posted 2011-10-06 09:05 PM

Nicely done!
Kat >^..^<

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

8 posted 2011-10-06 10:57 PM

Careful!
Don't be namin' names now.
Junk is clearly a matter of opinion.
Tough poem!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2011-10-07 06:51 PM

Sorry for getting to the thank yous late, but I've had a problem.

Owl, thanks for understanding.

The poet is a creature of his own making, but at the same time he/she is driven. That was what I tried to point out, and maybe everyone got it. Thank you, suthern

Appreciate it, Kat .

I'm not a snitch, Krawdad, never fear. Thanks for checking out my junk.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

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