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Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2011-10-03 06:36 AM

i woke to find you,
a soft weight of repose
on my breast, in the endless
there;
your breath was the dawn
a slow, climbing warmth
curled in my belly.
such a gentle, tender thing
a small sand-glass;
a concavity that curved your horizon
to my touch.
i could live in slivered eyes
in the sleep-drug
where thrushes sing in hymns
and i taste your name on my tongue,
sweet and thick.
reality is suspended
and transitory, fragmented
leaving the days for paradigms
and a blind recompense for this existing,
a plea perhaps, to give life to this devotion.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2011-10-03 06:42 AM

ms Nicole...seductive, saliva coated..sticky wet..enjoyed it ms

flash
Member

since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

2 posted 2011-10-03 07:42 AM

Evocative and the sand-glass an apt metaphor. Enjoyed also the sensuality.

Thanks for sharing,

Al

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-10-03 09:06 AM

The last line was the catalyst that lifted and cemented this poem into the superior category. Outstanding work.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2011-10-03 02:58 PM

your breath was the dawn
a slow, climbing warmth
curled in my belly.
such a gentle, tender thing
a small sand-glass;
a concavity that curved your horizon
to my touch.

I've started looking for your poems... and savoring the finds. *S*

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

5 posted 2011-10-03 05:14 PM

This one starts out so soft and delicate... then just builds and builds till it slams home with a jolt.

quote:
reality is suspended
and transitory, fragmented
leaving the days for paradigms
and a blind recompense for this existing

loved that!

Michael

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2011-10-04 07:55 PM

This is beautiful heart-food.

Enjoyed very much.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2011-10-07 04:22 AM

Nice writing, Nicole. Enjoyed.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2011-10-07 03:21 PM

Highly inspiring "stuff", dear Nicole.

Excellence offered with grace.

M

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