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A Study in Fragility
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A Study in Fragility |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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there is a spry fragility among the cattails an ache that burrows into the marrow reaching towards this abstract divinity here there is nothing but cold at my feet and a quiet solitude; a hush of briars scraping through sleet, through stone to taste blood as if a thorn were some divining rod - a priming, a burst of foreshadow. the snow is tired and hides its own secrets, and i hold it forlorn. it erodes, with its little cleansings, the black stain of violation; a tragic thing, this giving and taking. but i would love the winter, tender, nonetheless. a thousand rains bruise tiny shoulders a weight, if any, to bear; you tell me that i am not broken, and i will tell you that i have been breaking for an eternity. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
subtle stealth and strong shouting ..a pleasure to read ms |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Nothing is whole is it Nicole, as it should be. It's all about finding as many fragments as we can and leaving all of the missing pieces to our soul's imagination. What a terrrific writer you are! Thanks for the share.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive write, dear Nicole. Whenever we break the mending process is instantly activated, that's my credo. Captivating imagery. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I am sorry you are hurting, Nicole, but oh, oh, OH, and wow, wow and WOW, what an exquisite work of art emanates from your pain! Owl |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the snow is tired and hides its own secrets, and i hold it forlorn. it erodes, with its little cleansings, the black stain of violation; a tragic thing, this giving and taking. but i would love the winter, tender, nonetheless. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is so powerful and yet filled with bittersweet emotions. There is such tenderness in your poem, and I am in awe. *Brilliant* |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wow..agreed with the above comments, very powerful writing. A |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is an incredible piece, nicole. I especially loved the third stanza. Sometimes love is something were driven to do, no matter how well known its consequences. Michael |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Filled with conflict in mind and soul. Bitter-sweet, broken-hearted write, and yet you can understand the situation and hold your own, endlessly. That's tough, real tough. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I used to be in this situation. At least insofar as living with the pain. For years, because of what I perceived (rightly so most of the time) to be crimes against myself and those I loved. Finally, last October I learned how to do what everybody has been telling me to do for years . . . Forgive myself. The hurt is still there, but it is blunted now. ~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"you tell me that i am not broken, and i will tell you that i have been breaking for an eternity. " Tell us how. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
"and i will tell you that i have been breaking for an eternity. " So much heart in these lines, my friend ... I've seen it so many times in others... so,simply yet beautifully stated. j. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Your poetry is so beautiful written, enjoyed, ms. e |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This starts off wonderful and moves to sheer excellence and aches every step of the way. It's been said by others but is worth saying again... brilliant!! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very impressive, Nicole. Ida |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Thank you, everyone - so much for the replies. It's a comfort to be back and posting again. DS - Thank you for the read, sir. Richy - What a beautiful way to put it, thank you very much. Margherita - I agree 100%, thank you very much dear OwlSA - Thank you, you are such a sweet person. The pain is one of those bags that I carry...over the many years, I've learned how to carry it the best that I can. Blues - Thank you so much! Amaryllis - Thank you, I appreciate your read and reply. Michael - Amen brother; thank you... JL - Sometimes it is, indeed, TOO tough...but what can we do but fight on? Thank youJerry - It's a process...there are a lot of things to go through in the mind. Baby steps for me, but they're always moving forward. Thank you sir, very much icebox - Isn't that the crux of it; I tell around it, usually. I'm trying to work on that though...thank you jwesley - Well hello there, and thank you very much. I write with my heart (sometimes its messy and hard to clean up later).  ms e - As is yours, thank you suthern - Thank you very much for saying so, what a lovely reply Marchmadness - Thank you! |
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