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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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If I could capture heaven I'd bring it straight to you, Fill your heart with sweetest peace For you're good through and through If I could paint a morning The glory of sunrise Could not surpass the beauty I see within your eyes If I could build a mountain In all its majesty Its grandeur would not equal What your smile is to me If I could pause ocean's waves, Stop rain from falling down I'd protect you from all harm And erase ev'ry frown If I could spin straw to gold Or conjure happiness I'd have more to offer you Than my timid caress I just have this heart to give - I know that it's not much And right now, it is breaking As you slip from my touch Take the paths that beckon you Then come back home to me For waiting here, loving you Is where I'll always be |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh mama! Wow! This is so beautiful, a real heart melting love song, with such clarity in devotion and commitment. Suffice to say, I really enjoyed this. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
OOPS! Must have hit return twice.  LOL (my bad)Got a little too excited? JL  [This message has been edited by JL (09-22-2011 02:51 AM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JL: When a response is as beautiful as yours, I can read repeat after repeat and still be greedy for more. *S* Thank you so very much... I appreciate every word!! *S* |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I have to echo JL's wow here. Achingly beautiful, Ruth. Michael |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
It must be comforting for him to know you will be there waiting when he returns. Enjoyed, Ms, E |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Michael: To know you're back online would be enough to have me smiling... your wonderful response is icing on the cake! *S* Thank you! ebonygirl: I'm so glad you enjoyed... thank you!! *S* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You make the waiting appear as sweet and filled with deep devotion. Most beautiful gift of your heart, dear Ruth! Love, M |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Your poem truly show how much he is to you. Each line had me glued to the screen, enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You look so lovely in such tender light.  I love the simplicity of this...it's elegant and has no need for gimmicks and flourishes. Just sweet emotion from a pure heart. Absolutely lovely.  : |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Such a tender loving poem. You're all heart suthern gal!! Pretty pretty poetry~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Suthern, you have a blessed pen |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Love beautifully expressed, Ruth. ida |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Margherita: Thank you so much for finding beauty, kind lady!! ken: I'm so glad you enjoyed - thank you! serenity: You honor both me and my words, sweet lady... thank you! Blues: Thank you so very much! *S* DS: What a wonderful thought... thank you! *S* Ida: Thank you very much! *S* |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Oh gosh Ruthy, I was just humming along thinking wow what another wonderful poem, and then the last two verses just drew all the breath out of me and charged my body with endorphins or some such hormone... very very special mi lady. Whew, that was a nice way to get jump started for this Sunday morn! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Beautiful sentiments through and through this piece of work, suthern. If give all that you can and his continues to slip away, however, I'd let him go with your blessings and begin to look around for his replacement. They can be replaced you know. ~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Richy: Thank you so very much... I'd say I was sorry to interrupt your humming... but I like your response too much to be sorry! *S* Jerry: Thank you very much... I'm glad you liked! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You made my heart hurt a bit - it's a good hurt, but it feels your poem. Thank you for taking the time to bring me back. I would have hated to have missed this poem. xoxoxo A |
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AlexanderPoetry Junior Member
since 2006-07-31
Posts 30 |
Great piece with some wonderful lines. I am impressed. The art of writing poetry is simply sculpting with words. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
long deeeeeep sigh.......... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Alison: Thank you for blessing us with you once again... You were greatly missed. *S* And thank you for this wonderful response! *S* Alexander: I'm glad you found lines that pleased you... thank you! *S* luminosity: HUGS to you, sweet lady... thanks for stopping by. *S* |
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