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Open Poetry #47

Two For You By Request

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2011-09-17 11:18 AM

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love's shattered shards slash

unexpected memories

old scars bleed anew

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feathered starfire bursts

slicing night's cerulean blue

life's impassioned flash

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©2011 by icebox

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-09-17 11:40 AM

Loved the first one and liked the second. I write senryu's, but hardly ever post them.

~~ I'd kill for a Nobel Peace Prize. ~~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

2 posted 2011-09-17 11:42 AM

If senryu was by another name, it might be
icebox.

Excellent write.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-09-17 12:25 PM

So glad they are in here in their own threads, Charly, so all can see them - and not just in replies. Thank you.

Owl

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2011-09-17 01:28 PM

Awesome, Charley, like everything you write.
Ida

flash
Member

since 2010-11-28

Posts 213
miami beach, florida

5 posted 2011-09-17 03:09 PM

Strong dose of senryu with a bite! I write senryu but more humorous--yours are powerful!

Thanks for sharing,

Al

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

6 posted 2011-09-17 06:57 PM

very thought provoking.....intense and hypnotic too actually .... makes me think of those times when u think u recognize someone from the past and don't know what to expect....afraid to show old scars....to go back....

"unexpected memories

old scars bleed anew"

Really liked this!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2011-09-17 08:23 PM

Excellent cadence...
"life's impassioned flash"
Awesome lines!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2011-09-18 05:41 AM

Stunningly intense, dear Charly!

Love,
Margherita

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

9 posted 2011-09-18 06:42 AM

I like the first one best, but both are excellent..

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