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tanka prose: apparitions
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tanka prose: apparitions |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
I can see the house yet, with perfect clarity, I can see all its details, the family room with a sofa couch in one corner and a wooden bookshelf in another--a bookshelf that housed huckleberry memories-- and the open fireplace, piled high, on cold winter nights, with flaming logs-- and if you look closer, you will notice my two brothers wedged between mama and myself--even the lissome cat spread out between us--the shiny oak floor mirroring the fluid-moving fire-- as we all sat close, oh so close, and recounted stories of the days events until dark held to the light haunted by the faces of ghosts smiling from my boyhood |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
What a nice piece of work. Ghosts of the past in review. Enjoyed. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. Maranatha! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent...I love this form, and so it seems , do you. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
And I see it all with perfect clarity, too, flash. I love every word, every nuance, every image of this. Beautiful! Owl |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You work magic with your few words. Lori |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Jl, Owl, Lori, Ice: I'm so happy it seems to be working for you all. . I write very few tanka prose and haibun. I find it difficult to fuse the prose with the tanka and haiku, but with such encouragement, I will keep trying. Al |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What a magical dive into the past propelled by your captivating words, dear Al! Love, Margherita |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Thank you, Margherita for your generous remarks..I might as well begin using my real name--which is Al Al |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Al Gordon?  JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I feel as if I'm standing outside a window looking in as you frame memories, and the cat owns you all. Warmth pervades and a deep sense of family keeps cold at bay... My hands feel warmer! KL |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
JL, KL: Thanks for responding. JL: No, not Al Gordon. Is he a member? KL: Yes, you've nailed how I felt way back when and then looking at the boyhood negatives (they looked like smiling ghosts) sort of made me wistful and nostalgic for those bygone days. Thanks much. Al |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
huckleberry memories and lissome cat... how can I not love this? *S* |
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flash Member
since 2010-11-28
Posts 213miami beach, florida |
Thanks, S...glad you enjoyed! |
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