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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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there at the brim of sky and yesterday like a page blowing back from a whisper so one must reread the words again and consider how they fit the mind the forest of lady tree is glass sided how those limbs move against the other like the sounds of crystal sighing when sipped by the mouth of a lover and the savoring of breezes strum her as if her belly was the slender koto with lotus seeping her bosom scenery until her eyes are the glaze of amazing what ladder would those jacobs bring to give her stature to tempt with whim coloring each of the rungs in rainbow toes then perching her proper, partly parted just out of the gaze of panting grasps ______________ daark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (09-08-2011 11:43 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This has a philosophical depth that goes beyond the apparent lightness. Your mind is fascinating, dear D., as I said before. The magic lies in how you render the deep thought with your fantastic pen and bring it across "airy".  Love, M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
there at the brim of sky and yesterday like a page blowing back from a whisper so one must reread the words again and consider how they fit the mind If I'd read no further, I would have been enchanted. *S* But then... if I'd stopped... I would have missed this coloring each of the rungs in rainbow toes ... and it would have been my loss!!! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Enjoyed it, Daark. The first stanza just blew me away. There is enough meaningful material there that you could wrote a novel using it as a guide. I usually always read you, but seldom comment. That is because your concept of the written word is far and above my meager learning. But there is one thing, and you can take it to the bank I greatly admire your work. ~~ How come abbreviated is such a long word? ~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thank you sweet lady for the eyes ____________ ms suthern, you bless me when you go all the way..(um to the end I mean..)thanks lady ______________ jp, humble thanks poetmigo..your reviews are always a blessing and are always appreciated. |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
"just out of the gaze of panting grasps" Oh, the imagery. Oh, the mystery and allure. Lovely. "I'll tell you how the sun rose |
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