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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-09-08 07:58 AM


there at the brim of sky and yesterday
like a page blowing back from a whisper
so one must reread the words again
and consider how they fit the mind

the forest of lady tree is glass sided
how those limbs move against the other
like the sounds of crystal sighing
when sipped by the mouth of a lover

and the savoring of breezes strum her
as if her belly was the slender koto
with lotus seeping her bosom scenery
until her eyes are the glaze of amazing

what ladder would those jacobs bring
to give her stature to tempt with whim
coloring each of the rungs in rainbow toes
then perching her proper, partly parted

just out of the gaze of panting grasps

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daark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (09-08-2011 11:43 AM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-09-08 08:21 AM


This has a philosophical depth that goes beyond the apparent lightness. Your mind is fascinating, dear D., as I said before.

The magic lies in how you render the deep thought with your fantastic pen and bring it across "airy".



Love,
M

suthern
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2 posted 2011-09-08 08:33 AM


there at the brim of sky and yesterday
like a page blowing back from a whisper
so one must reread the words again
and consider how they fit the mind

If I'd read no further, I would have been enchanted. *S* But then... if I'd stopped... I would have missed this

coloring each of the rungs in rainbow toes

... and it would have been my loss!!!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
3 posted 2011-09-08 09:16 AM


Enjoyed it, Daark. The first stanza just blew me away. There is enough meaningful material there that you could wrote a novel using it as a guide.

I usually always read you, but seldom comment. That is because your concept of the written word is far and above my meager learning.

But there is one thing, and you can take it to the bank I greatly admire your work.

~~ How come abbreviated is such a long word? ~~

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
4 posted 2011-09-08 11:43 AM


ms mar, thank you sweet lady for the eyes

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ms suthern, you bless me when you go all the way..(um to the end I mean..)thanks lady

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jp, humble thanks poetmigo..your reviews are always a blessing and are always appreciated.

MorningStar
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5 posted 2011-09-08 05:18 PM


"just out of the gaze of panting grasps"

Oh, the imagery. Oh, the mystery and allure.
Lovely.

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

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