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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

0 posted 2011-09-08 12:23 PM

Live Coals to Embers

What were you like then?
I cannot remember
When the leaves were changing
Like live coals to embers

What did you say to me?
On those cold winter nights
When my hopes all wavered
When fears took flight

How did you change me?
Caught deep by my past
Why were you with me?
Misfortunes fell fast

What were you like then?
I cannot remember
My dreams gather round now
A night in December

On the black coated walls, they wrote my doom.

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2011-09-08 05:17 AM

This reminds me of Sara Teasdale for some reason..I guess it is because she captured mood in words very well, gave poetry that extra mellow, human heart feeling. Like you have done here.
enjoyed

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

2 posted 2011-09-08 05:40 AM

The title does it for me.
Really enjoyed your ebb of emotion in this write.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-09-08 07:48 AM

Very captivating!

M

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

4 posted 2011-09-08 08:27 AM

What were you like then?
I cannot remember
My dreams gather round now
A night in December

I really like this... from title through last line, I didn't just read the words, I felt them!

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

5 posted 2011-09-08 04:37 PM

I really loved this. I read it twice...

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2011-09-08 07:07 PM

A pleasure...James

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

7 posted 2011-09-08 08:09 PM

It's wonderful to see all these pennsylvania folk, I'm one myself.

Thank you for all your comments. It is a pleasure to share with you all.

What were you like then?
I cannot remember
When the leaves were changing
Like live coals to embers

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