Open Poetry #47 |
amber of cold springs tavern |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
we had both donned our gay apparel jeans and tee shirts and some laughing about how it didn't used to be that way and now she was smoking her medication while I was sipping mine more slowly the annual re-reunion we did there twice a year under the bill board sign where her dog was buried since 93' and we both still missed his heart keeping us together just for the petting we did small talk and a box of wheat thins burried some more regrets under oblivion and placed a beer can on top to mark the spot she said she would not make the trip in june said doc gave her til april at the latest I said I would come here for the resurrection just to see her and gypsy go to jesus heaven and maybe I would ride along for a ways too to watch them play fetch with one of her shoes and maybe catch them both looking down my way in case my leather didn't really turn into stone ______________ daark (highway series) |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
You never cease to amaze me with your story telling and imagery. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the highway series. Man this is earthy and vividly sharp. Tender ending DS and a real a reader holder. Cuss that Bob Dylan for stealing your role in life, jus cuss him! Eric |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Taking a page out of the great unwashed here and doing a bang-up job with it. Down-home gritty and forlorn with just a touch of kickass. It was all there for me, and I thank you for it, Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sinz..thanks lady ___________ eric, thanks amigo for looking in this window ____________ JP, thanks for the drive by, one of my favorite places to stop and do look backs.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ds...Could picture this...it made me sad. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i love the imagery and how easily your words flowed....a finely penned poem! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
the readers go right where you send 'em enjoyed |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Your touched my heart. And, again, I keep a Keeper from you. Ali-san |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie...thanks little neighbor _________________ faith, thanks and welcome to the bluezoo ms _________________ rex, thanks guy for the read ________________ ms ali-san, thanks babe |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
so carefully crafted...so very good...my favorite line: "burried some more regrets under oblivion" ...as far turning into stone, I wouldn't worry about that, Niobe |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks amigo |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A wonderful, nostalgic love poem with an interesting spiritual twist at the end. Passionate but not sentimenal. Great imagery, especially the subtle dog references carried all the way through. Bravo! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Exceptionally poignant, dear D.! You have such a unique way with the scenery of highways ... This series would be such outstanding material for a book. You said repeatedly you will not publish, but why would you want to deprive a vaster public from enjoying your masterpieces? Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A lazy, hazy kind of day for reflections in a beer can no less. Loved the look back~~ Only you slick~ |
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incwrite Member
since 2010-12-31
Posts 55new york |
cliffhanging words..kept me to my seat .. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bastet..thanks for the review _____________ babyblue..and only you too babe _________________ ms mar, thanks lady friend _____________ inc..thank you |
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