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Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2011-08-30 02:00 AM

still-life day in august

wispy tendrils of fog
lazily swirl over the silted river
morning sun glows
casting gold on yellow leaves
silence shatters, broken, by birds
trilling their morning songs
happy to greet another day

misty morning slow to wake
entices me to come out
coffee in hand, and savor, delight
in the gift of a monday day

downy white clouds balloon
on the horizon, popcornesque
framing forming geese practicing
flight 101 in preparation
to move on, away, 'til spring
leaving only the echo of mournful songs
captured within those pillowed clouds

blue skies of noon, blinding
garishly bright, overkill color
taunts me to relish this day
before it, once again, is painted gray

cranberries, permeate the air,
acrid aroma wafting in wind currents
ruby leaves brilliant, nesting, nestling
deep red, delicate, translucent, bitter
berries, always under-rated, last
to be picked, never bragged over
but still jewels shining in the tilted sun
pictures waiting to be taken

evening light casts its glow
under green leaves, touching on red
as it creates cranberry glass
in its most natural form

the day has come to its end
trees etched skeletons against
a muted blue night sky
the birds silent, sated
by chokecherry berries while
cranberries wait
to color red winter white

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Alison

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-08-30 04:16 AM

Such harmony and beauty in every line you offer us, dear Alison!

I have so much enjoyed moving through the day with you ... in the end the impressions of your observations gather in the heart and the world becomes a friendly, loving, peaceful, marvellous place.

Thank you for sharing your wonderment.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2011-08-30 06:36 AM

what about the moosefartnoises and beer cans poping tops....purdy babe!!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2011-08-30 07:59 AM

Ali-gal...

the alliteration in this is
beyond lovely. You've made
this sensory filled poem
a tongue trippin' delight!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-08-30 09:24 AM

Fantastic wordplay herein, Alison. "Popcornesque." I had to stop here and say the word over a few times, as images of small, fluffy white clouds scudded by in my thoughts. Love this poem. I'm keeping it.

~ I like long walks, especially when they are taken by people who annoy me. ~

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2011-08-31 08:25 AM

Very, very nice
Nice visuals, I can almost smell that certain scent that August gives off.
enjoyed

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

6 posted 2011-08-31 09:10 AM

~~niiice

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2011-08-31 11:54 AM

"cranberries, permeate the air,
acrid aroma wafting in wind currents
ruby leaves brilliant, nesting, nestling
deep red, delicate, translucent, bitter
berries, always under-rated, last
to be picked, never bragged over
but still jewels shining in the tilted sun
pictures waiting to be taken"

Wow! Talk about tickling the mind, you did a great job of it here.

Enjoyed the write.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

luminosity
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since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

8 posted 2011-08-31 02:40 PM

now THIS is poetry......very much enjoyed

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

9 posted 2011-08-31 05:09 PM

You painted a landscape in which I could see every brushstroke...and it is all beautiful. If that's the way it is there, I want to come visit!!!!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2011-08-31 10:02 PM

I was already packing my bags after reading your part of the community poem... now you'd definitely better brew another pot of coffee! *S*

Your pen painted a beautiful picture!!

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

11 posted 2011-08-31 11:11 PM

Yes Alison, I agree with everyone, your poem is fresh and beautiful,
Ms. E

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

12 posted 2011-09-01 05:43 AM

Senses treated to a banquet with this fine poem...especially liked ''popcornesque''...question now is will seeing clouds make me want to eat popcorn? LOL...

Thank you for this descriptive poem of beauty..

Goldenrose.

Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron.

Haf_Alive
Member

since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

13 posted 2011-09-04 02:57 PM

"misty morning slow to wake
entices me to come out
coffee in hand, and savor, delight
in the gift of a monday day"

i think we've all had mornings like this that you capture so well with your words. so simple that we almost take advantage of them. thanks for helping me to remember

HAF

Daddy Goose38
Member

since 2010-09-04

Posts 430
obama's a rice paper tiger

14 posted 2011-09-04 07:12 PM

Hey Ali ... Haven't seen you on IM for such a long, long time. Talk as, if, or when you can ok?
playful hugs
Jaime

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

15 posted 2011-09-04 07:21 PM

Alison, I hope you have lots of space. I am joining Balladeer and Ruth, so expect us all! I almost forgot to breathe during my first reading of the poem. As I have said so many times before, I am sure you are Alaska's most effective ambassador!

In its effect this poem reminds me of one you wrote about camping in Alaska. I think it was Martie and Margherita who were going to join me in arriving on your doorstep.

Owl

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

16 posted 2011-09-04 09:12 PM

You took the reader on a journey from dawn to evening-tide, Alison and you did it magnificently.

~~ How come abbreviated is such a long word? ~~

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

17 posted 2011-09-04 09:49 PM

grand-fine imagery ... wonderful 'write' !

YOU are a talented lady-fine!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

18 posted 2011-09-04 10:27 PM

Margherita ~ dear friend,

Thank you for appreciating the day with me.  It was(and is today) a beautiful fall day. My favorite time of year.

Love,
Alison

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Daark,

Sounds of music to my ears.  Mucho thank you.

Ali-san

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Awww, Sunshine, thank you for tripping with me.  You so make me smile.

A

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Thank you, Jerry. How nice to know you like it enough to keep it.

Alison

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Thank you, bel1e baby.

A

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JL

Thank you and

right backatcha!

A

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luminosity,

Thank you - what a lovely comment to share.

Alison

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Balladeer Man,

Spams in the cupboard waiting for you.  Thank you.

Ali

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Ruth,

Coffee, tea, spam, Pilot Bread, smoked salmon is all on the menu.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Thank you, lovely Ms. E

A

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Goldenrose,

ANY excuse to eat popcorn is a good excuse.  Just read the clouds and munch away.  Thank you so much for reading, enjoyng and commenting.

Alison

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HAF,

Always remember.  Just close your eyes and see those mornings that turn into beautiful days.  Thank you for commenting and enjoying.

Alison

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For sure, Jaime.  I'll check in just a bit.

Ali

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Diana,

Stuart, Abby, Kally, Mariah, Boodah, Rowdy, Kaz and I welcome you always.  Thank you for seeing the world with me.

xoxoxo
Alison

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Wow, Jerry, you came back again.  Thank you again.  Your comments mean a lot to me.

Alison

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Bruce,

You make me smile.  Thank you, my friend.

Alison

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

19 posted 2011-09-05 02:26 PM

Hi Alison, I would have like to write such an artful still life, everywhere there is perfumes and sounds and colors, this is fabulous and almost from the nature of a perfect dream, thanks for the jewel

yann

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

20 posted 2011-09-05 03:04 PM

Thank you, dear yann. You made my day.

Your friend,
Alison

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

21 posted 2011-09-05 04:43 PM

I get the feeling you're one of those people who like to take an hour to sit outside each day, and just watch how things change with time.

Me too...

Lovely poem. Though it's strange that even though the whole world may change, it is always one, often tiny detail that grabs our attention, and we revisit each day...

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

22 posted 2011-09-05 04:46 PM

Alison please give Stuart, Abby, Kally, Mariah, Boodah, Rowdy, Kaz and you lots of hugs each from me!

Owl

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

23 posted 2011-09-26 01:01 AM

Suncleaver,

You are right. I do watch our world a lot, but sometimes something just catches my eye. This evening it was a chokecherry tree in the evening sun. The leaves were all golden and there was one at the end of each bare branch. Beautiful - and I didn't have my camera.

Thank you for reading.

Alison

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Owly One,

They all send loads of hugs and doggy/kitty kisses!

xoxoxo
A

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