Open Poetry #47 |
The One |
ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
The One The One who is near, near, dear to my heart Who caresses my words between the palms of his hands Who wears scars of deeds, deaths and lives on long sleeves to hide Dark shadows and silhouettes of obsessions Sings melodies of Neil Young to my tender, open ears So that I may, ask nothing want nothing require nothing but desire everything that is good that is true that is love for his happiness without me, unless.... but he cannot. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms E, the conflict is lovely as a gown on you |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you Dark, Ms. E |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent write Ms. E. enjoyed. JL |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you for reading JL, Ms. E |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
love this, not sure if written from the heart or poetic licence, but very believable and worth a waiting game, no? On a more flippant note he can't be all bad if he sings Neil Young.juliex |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I love Neil Young too! As for him, we shall see. Thank you for words naturegirl, Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Haha! I hear you and concur with your synopsis that "he cannot." Wonderful give and take, yea and nay about this that I found joyous. Good writing. ~ Man who stands on toilet is high on pot. ~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you Jerry, LOLing with you, Ms. E |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Reading this i get the strong impression that you are enticed by the singing of a nonesuch bird in a tree? Have to agree with naturegirl about the Neil Young, perhaps you have a heart of gold and the miner sings for you? Enjoyed the read, thank you... Goldenrose Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Dear Goldenrose, LOL, Thank you for your insight, LOL,... perhaps. Ms. E |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
So that I may, ask nothing want nothing require nothing but desire everything that is good that is true that is love fine lines, fine writing. "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very well written, dear Ebonygirl, a perfect reflection of the heart's emotions and expectations, while learning to love unconditionally. Greatly enjoyed your poem. Love, Margherita |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
One of your best, Edna. ida |
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