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He Was There
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He Was There |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
He was there dark eyes, dark hair full of life not one to stare. Showing the way to a friend who was lost helping others find their way there is no cost. I think that's why he seems so giving with a smile, a twinkle of the eye, a handshake. He enjoys living. Watching in the shadows standing in the midst Head forward, eyes dancing Gentleman spirit coming down the aisle. His Hello's are easy. He gives them so freely. Welcoming all to the table. You and I are able to befriend him without ties so no need to be shy. Eyes meeting like a thunderbolt hitting center and through trying hard to be aloof can't let him see the trueth. Sound wisdom, gentleness and discretion, He, knows all our intentions. He was there dark eyes,dark hair full of life not one to stare. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very intriguing piece, ebonygirl. I can read a lot in this. Enjoyed. Michael |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you Michael, E |
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tuffluv66 Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 121Iowa, U.S.A. |
Extremely nice writing. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Okay, I really like this one. You gave us a person to understand, and, as we continued reading you presented a spiritual-like sense that continued giving the original concept much, much more. . . . "He was there dark eyes,dark hair full of life not one to stare." . . . This poem is so full of pure emotion a person would have to be a complete dullard not to feel a lift inside their chest as they read it. I used to be such a person. Thank goodness I am not anymore. ~ If I agreed with you we'd both be wrong. ~ |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing. Full of emotions, very gripping write! "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thank you Tuffluv66, JerryPat2 and Prasad Nataraj, your encouraging words mean a lot, ebonygirl |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice write. Has a calming effect. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I remember this one, Edna.I rarely forget a poem once I read it. Especially when I like it. Ida |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Thanks Ida. Have written more and will read them to you over coffee. Ms. e |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I wasn't around when you posted this, I am glad I found it now, because it is very captivating and well written, dear Ebonygirl. Love, Margherita |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
beautiful |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Strange. I had to read this several times, as I had a visual of a blue-eyed gentleman in mind... Enjoyed the read, and the re-reading, although I have no explanation for why I'd think of blue eyes.  Prolly a personal conflict of interest.  Thank you for posting this again. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Margherita and martiniat8, Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your comments, Ms. E Serenity Blaze, Are you psychic? Your visual is correct, he did in fact have blue eyes, they just had a dark quality. I'm impressed! Ms. E |
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