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ebonygirl
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0 posted 2011-08-04 07:57 PM



He was there
dark eyes, dark hair
full of life
not one to stare.

Showing the way to a friend who was lost
helping others find their way
there is no cost.
I think that's why
he seems so giving
with a smile,
a twinkle of the eye,
a handshake.
He enjoys living.

Watching in the shadows
standing in the midst
Head forward, eyes dancing
Gentleman spirit coming down the aisle.

His Hello's are easy.
He gives them so freely.
Welcoming all to the table.
You and I are able
to befriend him without ties
so no need to be shy.

Eyes meeting
like a thunderbolt hitting
center and through
trying hard to be aloof
can't let him see the trueth.
Sound wisdom, gentleness
and discretion,
He, knows all our intentions.

He was there
dark eyes,dark hair
full of life
not one to stare.


© Copyright 2011 E. M. L. - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 2011-08-04 08:24 PM


Very intriguing piece, ebonygirl.  I can read a lot in this.

Enjoyed.


Michael

ebonygirl
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2 posted 2011-08-04 08:27 PM


Thank you Michael,
E

tuffluv66
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3 posted 2011-08-04 09:14 PM


Extremely nice writing.
JerryPat2
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4 posted 2011-08-04 09:20 PM


Okay, I really like this one. You gave us a person to understand, and, as we continued reading you presented a spiritual-like sense that continued giving the original concept much, much more.

. . .

"He was there
dark eyes,dark hair
full of life
not one to stare."

. . .

This poem is so full of pure emotion a person would have to be a complete dullard not to feel a lift inside their chest as they read it.

I used to be such a person. Thank goodness I am not anymore.

~ If I agreed with you we'd both be wrong. ~

Prasad Nataraj
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5 posted 2011-08-05 12:05 PM


Fine writing. Full of emotions, very gripping write!

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

ebonygirl
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6 posted 2011-08-05 06:07 PM


Thank you Tuffluv66, JerryPat2 and Prasad Nataraj,
your encouraging words mean a lot,
ebonygirl

JL
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7 posted 2011-08-05 06:47 PM


Very nice write.
Has a calming effect.

Marchmadness
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8 posted 2011-08-05 08:29 PM


I remember this one, Edna.I rarely forget a poem once I read it. Especially when I like it.
                              Ida

ebonygirl
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9 posted 2011-08-05 08:31 PM


Thanks Ida. Have written more and will read them to you over coffee. Ms. e
Margherita
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10 posted 2011-08-28 04:52 PM


I wasn't around when you posted this, I am glad I found it now, because it is very captivating and well written, dear Ebonygirl.

Love,
Margherita

martiniat8
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11 posted 2011-08-28 05:37 PM


beautiful
serenity blaze
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12 posted 2011-08-28 06:12 PM


Strange.

I had to read this several times, as I had a visual of a blue-eyed gentleman in mind...

Enjoyed the read, and the re-reading, although I have no explanation for why I'd think of blue eyes.

Prolly a personal conflict of interest.

Thank you for posting this again.


ebonygirl
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13 posted 2011-08-28 06:37 PM


Margherita and martiniat8,
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your comments,
Ms. E

Serenity Blaze,
Are you psychic? Your visual is correct, he did in fact have blue eyes, they just had a dark quality. I'm impressed!
Ms. E

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