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Missed You |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon 
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This is an old one newly reworked and nearly completely rewritten While working in the flower bed Clods of dirt held in my hands I saw your car go zipping by When I looked up to swat a fly. The dirt clods shattered on the lawn But you were already long gone I missed you. Strolling down the grocery aisle I caught a glimpse of dazzling smile Corn and beans crashed to the floor But you just sauntered out the door And like so many times before I missed you I see you smugly smirking You don’t think I see you lurking While you babble on to no one That I don’t know what I’m missing To address this little matter I shall sit and write this letter Yes, my dear, I’ve badly missed you But my aim is getting better. ~Sheli~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Giggles and more giggles at the climax, divine chaos! Owl |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
*grins!* glad to give ya a giggle! my reply to the question "did you miss me?" (being the smart alek that I am) has always been "yup, but my aim is bound to improve one day." So, I made a poem out of it LOL ~Sheli~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... I love this!!! The ending is perfect!! |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Glad to give ya a laugh, suthern!  ~Sheli~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! Ya got me, but good. Hell, I even ducked -- without a smirk -- at that last line. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such a cute write, divine chaos! Enjoyed it. Love, Margherita |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
JerryPat & Margherita: So glad you got a chuckle from this! ~Sheli~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This made me laugh, DC. Cute write. Ida |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
*grins* glad to make ya laugh, Ida! ~Sheli~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I never missed you....but guys have an easier time aiming..(grin).cool stuff lady |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Aww this is just so sweet. It's the little things and those moments when the missing reminds us of better days. An honest to goodness poem full of heartfelt emotion. Really nice writing~ |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
DS: You guys do have it easier when it comes to aim, y'all get so much more practice than we girls do *grin* Blue: thanks for coming by =) glad you enjoyed! ~Sheli~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved this my friend! Simple, to the point, yet solidly setting the point - and very well phrased also. j. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I loved this as much as the first time that I read it. It reminds of all our late night talks too. I miss you. Love, Ali |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
I miss our talks too, girlie. Did you find "Grandpa's Yarn" too? I can't remember if you ever commented on that one, but thought you might like it. love you bunches, ~Sheli~ |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
glad you enjoyed, jwesley! thanks for reading ~Sheli~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I just got to it. Let's have a 'date' night soon. Wanna go out with me? We can talk all night, drink Perrier (okay, I will) and eat popcorn. Love you Ali |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Would love that honey. IM me sometime, I try to keep it turned on (usually invis) and am back and forth from the computer most of the day and evening while doing work and homework  I'm off to bed for tonight, but usually up later than this. hugs & loves ~Sheli~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
LOL, enjoyed this one divine, Ms. E |
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