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Train of Thought |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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~~~ A lonely railway station A pale moon striking yard A haggard washed out Hobo hugs the life's work of a bard A far off distant whistle A fast approaching train In crackling flames of open fire at embers he stares in pain While twilight's eerie haze reflects the twin of setting sun The leaping flames suppress the need of basking in the fun A headlight's gleam cascading A sadness through mournful wail The slow approach perpetual in the cadence of wheel and rail The old 600 rambles in as steam from ballast blows And brings with it a gentle rain that soaks right through his clothes Conductor shouting ... "A L L A B O A R D" as hearth ignites his notes He climbs aboard the train of thought While a fading thunder strokes ~~~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You took me there, and made me look back and wonder about what lies beyond the horizon. Fabulous scenery while conjuring up all those places our minds travel too. Really good reading, Mr. McCoy~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this...James |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Did my share of traveling this great land in the sixties and seventies, but never hopped a freight. We called those guy Dirty Faces. I have wandered into a couple of hobo jungles however and drank some of their wine with them. Nice work. Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I liked this! Lori |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow. I can feel the loneliness and melancholy in this one right down to the bone. Good writing. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Seems a shame doesn't it that atmosphere is gone these days? There was always something magical about it all. Train, the steam, conductor, the adventure although much simpler than it is now days much more heartfelt. You have a very nice way of creating superb images with such an economy of words. I really enjoyed this. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Wonderful Imagery, I could just picture all of it. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I'm thinking now that I very much like your writing. Enjoyed your train of thought! Helen |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i agree this is wonderful...a great wonderful poem! very nicely done! faith There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
`The train of thought`...wonderful read, here. Especially liking the warmth of the fire, the cold of the spray...I felt it all! So sad to think of those notes burning... Amaryllis |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Loved it!!! now off to that ver moving train of thought!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sometimes I wish I would stop climbimg that train of thought...unless it was taking me to someplace beautiful and restful~~~ nice to be reading you  M |
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