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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2011-07-22 01:42 PM

THE CROWDED ROOM
22 July 2011

The room was packed.
People milled and talked
and buzzed and laughed,
but they were all a blur,
well, almost all,
except for one.

Owl

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-07-22 03:50 PM

Hmmmm...across a crowded room? Sounds like a moment. Looks like you caught it.

Lori

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2011-07-22 10:02 PM

As long as there is one thaat's all you need to create a beautiful poem.
Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-07-23 02:44 AM

Yes, Lori, something like that . . . Thank you. Smiling.

Thank you, Ida. Giggles.

Owl

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2011-07-23 02:16 PM

This kinda drags me back to my Pink Floyd days:

"A restless eye across a weary room
A glazed look and I was on the road to ruin"

As Lori says, it is a moment. A moment you captured well... and while David Gilmour might claim it to be a momentary lapse of reason, it's one I certainly can relate to, and doesn't have to lead to regret.

THAT moment is one we all live for.

Michael

Word Weaver
Member

since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

5 posted 2011-07-23 04:01 PM

You've got us all wondering who that one is/was. I enjoy a poem that leaves you thinking.
Namaste'
Marcia

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

6 posted 2011-07-23 06:44 PM

The "one" came into focus. I want "one" too.
Nice!
Ebonygirl

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2011-07-23 08:34 PM

Exceptionally well done. The standout in the crowd. Yes. Well done indeed.

~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

8 posted 2011-07-24 01:07 PM

I'm not much on crowds. I'm a one on one person. So, one is good.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2011-07-24 06:33 PM

Thank you, Marcia.  I, too, love to have a poem linger on my mind.

Ebonygirl, thank you for your enjoyment of the poem.  Wishing one on you, lol!

Thanks, Jerry, for your kind words.

Thanks for reading and commenting, Sue.  Smiles.

Owl

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