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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2011-07-15 12:19 PM

WISTFUL EYES
15 July 2011

I spread out my arms
ballerina-wide
to draw the drapes
on the soft hours,
but the comfort
of the sky
kissing the sun goodbye
in rose and gold fire,
lingered on my tongue
and stole my whispers
and carried them
over the horizon
and far away
wrapped in lace
on a milk-white horse
and
my arms
slipped to my side
in awe
and
I
didn’t.

Owl

Shortysdadd
Junior Member

since 2011-06-26

Posts 39

1 posted 2011-07-15 02:41 PM

Wonderful owl!!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2011-07-15 06:31 PM

Exquisite, dear Owl! Spellbinding.

Love,
Margherita

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2011-07-16 12:37 PM

fine writing !!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2011-07-16 01:57 AM

Yes, spellbinging. You leave me in silence.

xoxo
A

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2011-07-16 02:09 AM

Magical, Diana.
Ida

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

6 posted 2011-07-16 03:08 AM

Thank you, Margherita.  I am glad you found it so.  Smiles.

Thank you, Bruce.  I am glad you enjoyed it.

Thank you, Alison.  I am honoured.  Please tell Boodha-darling that Wol replied to his delightful and unexpected message to her in "Your Greatest Gift to Me".

Thank you, Ida.  I am glad I could bring you some magical moments.

Owl

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2011-07-20 02:22 PM

You paint such a magnificent scene with your pen... I read it and read it again... and only then remembered to breathe!

Beautiful work!

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2011-07-21 11:21 AM

Thank you, my dear friend, Ruth. I am glad it gave you such pleasure. Smiles.

Owl

Klassy Lassy
Member Elite

since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

9 posted 2011-07-21 05:58 PM

Nor could I, nor could I. I want to catch the fire on my tongue, too. ~Karen

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

10 posted 2011-07-21 08:26 PM

Fine writing

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

11 posted 2011-07-21 09:21 PM

Now---see here is how a poet shows us the world-- the world in words..words that add to a sum far more than their individual worth. And yet they are used with economy, not one too many.
You know how to add them up very well to gain these means, as did the classic poets..

Your poem reminds me of "Wind, and window Flower"..by Robert Frost..only yours is far more sensual.

Diana says:
" ...the comfort
of the sky
kissing the sun goodbye
in rose and gold fire,
lingered on my tongue
and stole my whispers
and carried them
over the horizon"

Frost says:
"But the flower leaned aside
And thought of naught to say,
And morning found the breeze
A hundred miles away."

The morning found the "breeze a hundred miles away".(Frost)

The sunset carried your whispers "over the horizon"

Both poems are just grand romantic pieces, though I love yours a little more, because of the deeper imprint of sensuality........ ;-)

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

12 posted 2011-07-22 11:38 AM

Thank you, Karen.  I can see how much you enjoyed it and I am glad.

Thank you, Prasad.

Ford, I am blown away by your praise.  Robert Frost is a favourite poem of mine.  However, I don’t know ”Wind and Window Flower.”  I wil google it and save a copy.

And that you preferred my poem to Robert Frost’s – well, that leaves me speechless for the next 3 lines!  Thank you for telling me.  I am going to get a swollen head, now!
Owl

eminor_angel
Member

since 2003-05-22

Posts 323
Canada

13 posted 2011-07-24 10:29 AM

good job! I understand wanting to linger.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

14 posted 2011-07-24 05:48 PM

glad to see this fine 'write' back near the top of the "P.I.P.-land" queue !

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

15 posted 2011-07-24 06:28 PM

Thank you eminor_angel. Yes, I don't want to miss a moment of it.

Thank you, Bruce, for your kind words.

Owl

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