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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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woke up this morning spiderwebs covered my brain clutched and gripped would not let go looked in the mirror for a look-see stared back at the hollow eyes from pictures of death camp survivors Dachau, Treblinka, Auschwitz, et al if anything creative hovers inside those eyes they are refusing to come out and play tried a poem and another a third try, same result no sense working on the novel brain won't function not today it's been thirty-odd years that I've gone on a binge feel like going on one today I won't wouldn't help I know what the problem is spend too much time here in the Hovel talk to my mutt go to the store take her for a few walks daily but basically I sit here and mold brain cells are giving up for want of human conversation becoming extinct at an alarming rate dreamed last night about my future not too sure I'm overjoyed about it seems I'm going to be initiated into a misplaced tribe who wanders in and out within your essence I had to wake up sit up try to stop the dark thoughts from line-dancing through my mind thought about drinking a Bloody Mary but all I had was the celery drat thought about going down where the prostitutes hang around like cheap dresses an ogle them like a celibate schoolboy instead I'm writing this poetical soiree if you count an event as myself, the mutt and you then soiree works for me okay! I do believe I've written myself out of the doldrums how about that? ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Writing keeps me going too, Jerry. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Of all the alternatives you envisioned I think this was a great choice, your brain functions well and you keep it in good exercise, but then conversations are important too. Sometimes we must reach out to others, there is always an opportunity. There are surely also other dog lovers who go for walks. Dogs can create connections. People usually are diffident, as if saying a word to them means wanting something from them, but in most cases they crave some contact and will appreciate a few words of kindness, which can develop into a nice conversation. Love, Margherita |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
woke up the same this morning jerry, but you enlight my day, excellent write, yann |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Well at least you woke up, J.P. This reminds me of a John Prine song.. "When I woke up this morning, things were lookin' bad Seem like total silence was the only friend I had Bowl of oatmeal tried to stare me down... and won And it was twelve o'clock before I realized That I was havin' ... no fun" Maybe an "Illegal smile" might help? Kidding aside, I think this would make good song lyrics. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
John Prine. Haven't listened to me in years. Used to love him, and still do the first album or two, it is politics that made be shy away from him over the years. Hey! You were right. At last I woke up, at this age that is a miracle. Have a good day man. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
thought about drinking a Bloody Mary but all I had was the celery I admit it; I chuckled. Sometimes, a rambling catharsis is just what the doctor ordered. They even manage to have their moments of genius.  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Capricious -- love that name -- I agree, this isn't the first time I've "talked/wrote" myself out of the doldrums. Thanks for stopping by. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Gottta love ya Jerry, you know how much i enjoy it when you take us along with you inside your head. Even your doldrums are anything but boring.  Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank YOU, Lori, you know how much I enjoy reading you saying it too. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Marchmadness, I am very sorry I missed thanking you for your comments on this poem. Forgive me. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Margherita , it is with great sadness that I have failed, once again, to recognize your contribution to this poem. thank you ver much, and again, and again, I am sorry. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yann, I apologize for not commenting on your comment. Truly sorry. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..a man's honesty expressed lyrically ..i say, "yess..!" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Absolutely, Spiros. Thanks. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Well done, Jerry - for the poem and the personal victory. That is the very best way to get out of the doldrums, to be able to do it yourself - not that help isn't good too, but on your own is best. Hugs and love to Zoe and love to Maude. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate your input, Owl. thanks. ~ 24 hours in a day ... 24 beers in a case .... Coincidence? ~ |
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callalily Junior Member
since 2011-05-22
Posts 22 |
writing fixes a lot of things..made me smile at the end |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, callalily, much appreciated. ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Writing gibberish is much better than procrastination, my friend - at least one gets somewhere, even if it's only to the signs that give direction... enjoyed, j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah! I agree, j, very much so. Thanks for the comment. ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~ |
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