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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Wrapped in the cerebrum of space, contemplate the open door next to the closed place, each stepping stone marked with a staircase wrapped in clouds and an arrow pointing up; yet like normal time and space of day, highways ply the soft ground and it seems only I blow the stars around. Cornered in reality I take a breath and feel the sucking air coming to me from some other place. I take it to me like my own, alone as star beneath the moon. The soft purr of evening is coming now, across the mountain it weaves its light and pulls the curtain slowly, slowly down the tops of trees, still lit with fire you can see the breeze take hold of one last stem and then lost in dim it is sucked in. A canopy of clouds lit now by another fire from streets where people play electric lights and dance on curbs where rain once poured a river until the sky was dry; slowly now the music drifts from open doors and the white milky sky comes down and touches ground. While the city melts into 10 o'clock, A laugh sparks one street, then two, where you and I and sky gather like old friends sleepy and glad to be home again. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hi Martie, good to see you posting. Starting your journey with an arrow pointing up you suddenly are concerned with reality and stars you claim as your own. This is a lovely grouping of wonderment and fires of the soul as you fulfill your destiny and are at peace within yourself. Born Free........Taxed to Death |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie...little neighbor you make a thousand years into one little penphoto..enjoyed you lady! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
What a treat to read you Martie! Your words are so special  Lori |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sis... Because we have talked, in person, on a shared couch, quietly, when it comes, a long long time from now, that you see an arrow pointing up? That's because I believe enough for both of us.  |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Hi Martie ... I think I'm more of a daytime person ... I'm mostly out to lunch an excellent piece ... enjoyed |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine imagery and impressionism ... I am particularly fond of: "The soft purr of evening is coming now, across the mountain it weaves its light" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"slowly now the music drifts from open doors and the white milky sky comes down and touches ground." I was right there and I thought I saw you passing by. Beautiful stuff Martie Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You are quite the poet, Martie. Always look for your work. Ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Well, I certainly can't quote one line because they're all great! All your poems are great, Martie! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jerry...Thanks for seeing so clearly into the heart of this poem. DS...Sometimes I feel like I've lived that long and sometimes I've just begun. Lori...thanks for such a special comment. Sissie...I believe you do. Rex Allen...I'm a daytime person too, but some times night makes me take notice. Eric...So, that was you. Ida...you're so sweet. Helen...It's good to see you...thank you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is classical Martie Only you weave the evening light I enjoyed reading this - every beautiful image Liz |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Was out walking this evening and it was just so pretty out, the way the sun slept and the clouds swept across the sky. Then to come home and find this, the combination breathes life into your poem and your poem is the perfect compliment to a winters day. Lovely, you~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yes, life itself is time travel. I looked at the moon tonight. It was a fine silver sliver of a slipper moon in a dark corner of a cold clear sky and its familiarity across the ages through countless was undeniable.  c. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Ah, yes. Your words are always a treat to read! Amazing stuff, Martie. All my best~ Amaryllis |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I'm simply awed at how easily this seems to flow from your mind. Incredible writing. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz...it makes my day brighter to read a lovely comment from you. Thank you Lori...so happy to add to your evening as you have so many times to mine...Lovely you. Charly...I saw that silver slipper moon...it was remarkably like the one you saw. Amaryllis...Thanks for your positive words...they are always appreciated. XgarapanX...Hello and thanks so much for the review. I appreciate your words. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
hey ol' Martie gal! There can be great contentment in our life's journey or path, if we only let it be a pleasurable one and remember to drink in the sights along the way. Lots of good wishes for ya, Martie, Jeff |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If only I could see what you see, Martie~~there is always such beauty in your words. Wishing you a healthy happy new year. M |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Enjoyed... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Coco...thanks for bringing this poem back up...it was such a special day. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jeff...there is something in each moment to be appreciated, and sometimes we pass right on by. I always appreciate you. Maureen....You see all from your own clear heart light. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Martie, before I click to open a Martie poem, I make sure I am seated completely comfortably because I know I am going to experience something out of this world, and I don't want anything to spoil the Martie-excellence - and I am never disappointed. I love this poem, very especially the changing panoramas in the last 3 stanzas. Owl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Diana...you do have a way of making everyone you read feel they're special. So are you! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Quote: "The soft purr of evening is coming now, across the mountain it weaves its light and pulls the curtain slowly, slowly down the tops of trees, still lit with fire you can see the breeze take hold of one last stem and then lost in dim it is sucked in." This is the reason I revisit your poetry You make me "feel" Your wonderful images I love this poem, Martie Good work Miss you Liz |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Absolutely wonderful walk with you, my friend. Looking through you eyes is beautiful indeed. Much enjoyed, j. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Oops! [This message has been edited by jwesley (05-24-2011 09:55 AM).] |
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