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Apocalypse Day !
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Apocalypse Day ! |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Apocalypse Day! As I opened my eyes, the day rushed in, how sunny and beautiful and devoid of sin. Lawnmowers running. Children's voices at play and a breeze off the coast this weekend Saturday. I waved at my neighbors, Sam, Ernie and Mack. They busied with yardwork but smiled and waved back. I looked for my car keys. The cupboard was bare. But what was this something I sensed in the air? An eerie, gut wrenching thickness of black... Wait ! That's when I heard it, a lightning crack. I raised my head, the neighbors did too. Our attention was riveted like nails in glue. Then Boom! The Sun darkened. The Moon turned red. An immense Gate appeared, scraping sky with dread. We looked up trembling, not knowing what to say. Who thought such a Saturday would be Judgement Day ! The Gate blasted open as if punched with a fist. Thru black smoke rode the First Horseman of the Apocalypse; gold crown, arrows flying from his Bow Archer's hand on a white horse, Jupiter, for the conquering of Man. We scattered, ran screaming in the streets from this. Out leaped the Second Horseman of the Apocalypse. In his hand a great Sword slicing Peace from the Earth on a red horse, Juno. Great chunks did burst! In the shocked-gripped panic of fear in our midst did gallop the Third Horseman of the Apocalypse on a black horse, Neptune, Balance Scales in his hand letting loose the Flood Waters pounding Man, pounding Land. The Fourth Horseman, Death, on Vesta a pale horse, plunged thru the Gate on his predetermined course beckoning with a hand's white bony finger slim for all of Hell's Hordes to erupt and follow him ! All Seven Seals broken now, lightning cracks loud. A mighty Angel descended clothed in a mighty cloud with feet and legs of fire, one on land, one on sea. Seven angels played on trumpets one Destruction symphony. Man profaned God's Wisdom by not doing what he oughta'. Now the Beast with seven heads comes rising from the water with ten horns sharp and a wet body cold to swallow and devour all the Souls of Man whole ! Twilight shivers shake the ground in evening’s light decay. Hoofbeats rumble! Lightning strikes to claw the night in gray. The Beast knocks once your door and it opens under power, and to your ear from out the darkness whispers……“Judgement Hour!” Namyh |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Great bit of putting your readers on notice about The Apocalypse. Your poem had great depth, the rhyming scheme was good and the premise was scary, ugly and downright beastly. Your expertise carried me right along with you as I cringed, eyes opened wide and thoroughly was mesmerized with your work. ~ Age and treachery will always overcome youth and skill. ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Excellent depiction of Revelations, you and your neighbours bringing it right on to our doorstep. Owl |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wow, dear Namyh, you have put a lot of energy into this, it sizzles. Your poem is so effective that it could be read to the students of the Book of Revelation, as an integration, to make things clearer. (A few years ago at night I was in bed reading the Apocalypse ... suddenly there was such a tremendous "rolling" noise getting louder and louder and then the bed started to shake and ... fear paralyzed me as I thought the end of the world had actually arrived, just while I was reading about it! It was a very strong earthquake, with epicenter distant around 150 km ... Never since I dared to read that text again!) I prefer to relax in the knowing that Absolute Love will be our end station ... But no doubt many humans have actually gone through such terrible destruction, when there are screams of terror and desperate cries for help. Love and peace. Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; I am mastered totally by Love." (Rumi) |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
excellent work...i've never read a poem on this subject...very unique and totally engrossing.... Love, Faith There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
JerryP – Just when you think it’s going to be another bright day like yesterday, this darkness comes along. And there we are standing at the Abyss wondering what happened. The Human Race! You gotta love ‘em. I wanted to portray the suddenness of such an event. Thanks Jerry for confirming that it was scary, ugly and downright beastly. What poet writing from the fringe could ask for more. Most of all, I’m ecstatic that you enjoyed this advance annoucement which I hope will also add points at my weigh-in on Judgement Day. LOL. Thanks JP. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Owl – I hope when that knock comes, they start at my neighbor’s door. I like the guy but this should give me just enough time to run to nowhere which I feel is gonna be the plight of everybody that day. However now, I’m so very happy to provide a “depiction” for you this day. Makes a poet proud. And thanks Owl for putting a ‘hoot’ in my day. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Margherita – To be reading the Apocalyse at night with the roar of an impending earthquake is indeed a trauma to last a lifetime for anyone. And subsequently colliding with my Frankenstein creation here is a true merit of your fortitude. But I’m so glad this work sizzled effectively for you and very honored for any clarity found there. Let me stop. My head’s startin’ to swell. Thanks loads for sharing Margherita, for stopping by with your words, and for your Wow. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Faithmairee – It was a sunny summer day with blue skies and I was sitting at a half open window. There were children playing and someone was mowing a lawn. The thought of what would happen if, on this day, that event occurred got this work started. Poets! Go figure! However, that you found this unique, new and totally engrossing injects joy into these old bones which makes them rattle just a little bit less. Thanks for the serum, Faithmairee. I’m starting to feel a lot better now. LOL. Namyh |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Wow! You sure can tell a story with poetry. You rivet me when you write like this. Alison |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Alison – I am so glad my rivet gun was working for you. I try to tell a good story. So very happy it put a “Wow!” in your day as your enjoyment has put one in mine. Namyh |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Mesmerising, Namyh. Ida |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Ida – No poet could ask for more than for a work to mesmerize. So very glad this did it for you. Thanks Ida, now you got me feeling a little bit woozy, no doubt a result of me being mesmerized by your enjoyment. And I don’t want a cure! Thanks Ida. Namyh |
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