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Sweet Wrath
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Sweet Wrath |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Sweet Wrath You ask me where I’ve gone altho I am still here in heart ~ you say it is not as it use to be, sweet wrath tears our world apart… how can it be, all this time spent; in Heaven’s name, where is the love? You ask where the love went, ah sweet wrath, on wings of a dove… the terror of your youth, the dying flame; her course of action was not the same as mine, for still here am I, your life, still by your side, forever your wife. Cannot you take the memory’s pain and rid of it for sanity’s sake? Oh sweet wrath come evening, in the darkness I’ll lay awake… Knowing that forever here I will always be, sweet wrath of thy heart causes tender misery. 12 May, 2000 ©KRJ |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Bittersweet and reflective is this poem about the frantic thought that love and passion have found dark corners to secret themselves in. So difficult to keep the heart throbbing one for the other when life and living and bills and . . . Well, things change. It has to, I believe. What is left after lust and high passion is . . . love, and there are those who cannot quite grasp this concept. Nice feelings within this poem. Intolerant people are the people who do not believe the way we want them to, which makes us intolerant by default.—July 26, 2010 |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are such a gifted poetess, your heart on your sleeve becomes you, Karilea. You write with such sensitivity and so often your poetry brings tears to my eyes, at the same time it is always just as lovely as can be. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Aw Karilea, this is very moving. So heartfelt and honest...yet I hear the patience and faith behind the words. It`s certainly a secret that many young couples (unfortunately) do not yet know...that if we ride out the storm waves and heck, even the tsunamis, our union will strengthen and deepen to an unprecedented degree. Long-suffering love is very under-rated...I find it much more amazing and fulfilling than the fireworks of early passion! Hang in there dear. I enjoyed this write...woman to woman, I...understand.  All my best~ Amaryllis |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
a bittersweet and beautifully written poem...lovely work! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karilea I feel the pain in your poem and ache for you. I hope that creating beauty of your pain, was carthartic, or that, at the very least, it alleviated the pain and the pressure for a while. There is nothing lonelier than being with somebody with whom you are not. You are a better woman than I am, Gunga Din. I didn’t stay. I left after 7 years of not being allowed to be me. Owl |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..>>forgiveness and prayer helps a lot..>spiros |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
wonderful poem nicely worded in my opinion. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
The saddest part of all is how many hearts this touched with recognition...but in that there is comfort of understaning you are not alone. Lori |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well Sunshine one, I have always known you to be of strong character and true love cannot be found where it truly does not exist, nor can it be hidden where it truly does. Excellent writing! Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is very beautifully written. It is like I could picture your pain in my mind as I read. I truly enjoyed this read!!!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am always thrilled with poets who accept me for who I am. As for this poem? It was a great reminder for me at what has so quickly passed in this last decade. I'm pretty sure I can honestly say, I'm glad I held on... for better or worse, through sickness and health. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Excellent piece and I like how you stick to your values |
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AlCowie Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 92London, UK |
I love the way the poem creates a watercolour so that you have to imagine so much more than the poem gives whilst having the bounds of what is written to guide you. Lovely |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...poignant in emotion, musical in delivery....beautifully written!! |
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Brian James Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 147Winnipeg |
This is so beautiful, Sunshine. I haven't read one of your poems in years, I believe, and it's nice to. I love in particular how you start and end on that familiar note, the "I'll always be here," but by the time the poem is over you've added a bit of a dark dimension to it. You're speaking less to the other person and more to yourself. "This is where I will be always." It seems to have a blend of commitment and resignation that's really soul-stirring. That's what I got from it, at least. I love your poetry. Nice reading from you. "To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form." |
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