Open Poetry #47 |
Medusa |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. The sun This morning A rose— in A clear blue sky The sea Sounds In my ear Waves of my Own memories Lap the shore That young Strong man Still within His courage Against the fear A soft cool wind Brushes my hair I love being me I’m so happy You’re not here . |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Love it! Love it! Your last line is divine! Lori |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful. Connecting the title to your last lines increases the sense of freedom you convey so intensely. Love, Margherita |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I really liked this one Juju -Juju |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Nice work. Everything completed the other. Everything. ~ Passionate kiss, like spider web, leads to undoing of fly. ~ |
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Dawn Brink Junior Member
since 2011-04-28
Posts 44South Africa |
Beautiful! "Waves of my memories". What an image! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Such a sense of freedom. Love it. Ida |
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