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Voyage of Days |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
One must learn to adjust when life throws you a curve Courses change rapidly, heel to starboard or port Through this voyage of days one may come to observe Muster all of your humor and most of your nerve Keep your wits at all times or disaster you'll court One must learn to adjust when life throws you a curve If you'd stay off the rocks you had damn better swerve Angry gods make abusing you their first resort Through this voyage of days one may come to observe Though convinced so much crap's far more than you deserve Taking stock of that days' nightly damage report One must learn to adjust when life throws you a curve Life can oft' make you into the "sea farin' sort" And turn swearin' into a competitive sport! Through this voyage of days one may come to observe One must learn to adjust when life throws you a curve. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Nice villanelle. I've tried it a time or two myself. My attempt wasn't nearly so grand as this. Learning to deal with life, if, of course, different according to the person. But this poem give a really good starting point to stand with your back against the wall and fight back in your own particular way. ~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
JerryPat2, Thanks for your comments. When I started this, I really had all intents to try and keep it serious, alas, my true nature got the better of me, lol. At some point I will without a doubt post something more befitting the form, apparently, I'm just not there yet. Doc |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love the curves that you throw at us. I don't miss any of your poetry. I just have to catch up sometimes. Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Doc, I highly enjoyed traveling along your "Voyage of Days". Your skills create top quality reads! Love, Margherita |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison & Marherita, You two ladies are far too kind, thanks very much for your replies. Doc |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yep, they are too kind, for sure!  Back to the workshop for you, doc!  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, I assume you're referring to the last quatrain wherein I have deviated from " A B A A " to "B B A A ". I'm not sure, but I almost think I remember that was an acceptable variation which still met the forms requirements. Thanks for catching it, and I'll get back to you on that after some more research. Doc Nope, chalk another one up for Balladeer. I was unable to find any instances where " B B A A " was used in the villanelle format " A B A A " it is. Doc |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I knew you would see that, Doc. It's actually a point in your favor that you knew what you were doing and simply thought there was an exception to allow for it. I'm also a little confused as to the meter. I'm guessing that the first and third lines are anapestic because I can make that work on all but the first line of the second stanza but, as far as the middle lines I'm a little lost (which is nothing new for me!) Help me out here??? |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, Thanks. Once again you are correct (no surprise there) about the meter's variation. I could lie and say I was experimenting with "Falling Meter" in the middle lines to see how it would work with the Anapestic, or I could be honest and just say I let my mind wander on this one. Perhaps something actually written in "Falling Meter" would be a good class exercise? Doc |
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