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naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

0 posted 2011-04-15 04:21 PM

Kamikaze leap into
thin air, suspended,
spinning slowly, safely,
a single thread
the safety net.

Silken lifeline quickly
gathered in, climbing
back, position reinstated,
carefully chosen cloister
sealed tightly shut.

Sequestered like a
hammock strung between
leaves, outwardly motionless,
a metamorphis within,
genesis revisited, reformed.

Emerging slowly, crumpled
wings unfurled, pumped
full with lifes
juices, flexed, tested
for first flight.

Poised like a
living tapestry, watching,
I cannot leave,
tables turned, transfixed,
soporific, hypnotic beauty.

Languidly flitting away,
I remain, subliminal
messages imprinting, mood
enhanced,emerging from
my crysalis, rejuvenated.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-04-17 06:49 AM

Dear Julie, you have created wonderful imagery, I enjoyed your poem greatly.

This deserves more attention!

Love it.

Love,
Margherita

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

2 posted 2011-04-17 11:42 AM

What a wonderful whirl happens to the reader , much enjoyed

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-04-17 12:02 PM

I lived within your exquisitely told whirling to metamorphosis of life of the crysalis, naturegirl. What perfecto lines. What drama. What life!

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

4 posted 2011-04-19 06:18 PM

thank you all for your very kind comments...must be spring in the air I think I'm coming out of hibernation,lol.x

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-04-27 01:02 AM

loved the cadence you've employed here...a very nice write

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

6 posted 2011-04-27 01:16 AM

Lovely, naturegirl. I love how the real subject only became a metaphor at the end of the poem, and how even then, it was what drew the poet and the reader to the reality behind (the reality of) the now (almost) metaphor.

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2011-05-01 09:54 PM

enjoyed...James

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