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Orchestrating Spring
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Orchestrating Spring |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Orchestrating Spring Pussy Willow purr while Dogwoods bloom Sandhill cranes easily join the show Geese sing loud songs, honking out of tune Strident sunshine smothers winter’s gloom Solo voices soar with golden glow Pussy Willow purr while Dogwoods bloom Frozen rivers compose sonic booms Flowing water hums as channels grow Geese sing loud songs, honking out of tune Slender branches rattle witches broom Needles whisper as the west winds blow Pussy Willow purr while Dogwoods bloom Vibrant flowers clutter forest’s room Graceful shimmy weaving to and fro Pussy Willow purr while Dogwoods bloom Geese sing loud songs, honking out of tune - Alison |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I do hear the captivating sound of Spring in this beautifully written poem, dear Alison! It springs off the page in sweet harmony, even if the geese are out of tune ...  Love and hugs. Margherita |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful orchestre Alison, I can hear all the lusic and sounds of spring.... have a nice day yann |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Those d*a*m*n honking geese... They poo all over our dock  Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
a symphony of rhythm and sound, led by a maestro...brava, brava.... |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
Pussy Willow purr while Dogwoods bloom Geese sing loud songs, honking out of tune i love how you have woven these two lines throughout the poem...each a sweet unpredictable surprise... : ) ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alison - spring has sprung for sure, and your writing is of spring's life... BC |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, Nice work for Spring. Springs all right here in the hood too. Love Bobby |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
As always, you have penned a beautiful poem of Spring here. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
um ali-san..this almost sounds kinky...I like it..(grin) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look at you doing great... this is wonderful! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Frozen rivers compose sonic booms Flowing water hums as channels grow Geese sing loud songs, honking out of tune ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is glorious, Alison~ Breathtaking visuals, they come alive in living color. Wonderful, wonderful poem~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Absolutely delightful, Alison. Just need to tell you that geese always honk IN tune. But they and I will forgive you. Smiles. We are experiencing Autumn here, of course, so your poem is particularly uplifting! Owl |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
I'm having a bad day, but this brigtened it up. Thank you, Z. Arana Darkwolf |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dear Margherita, I knew you would hear the song. Thank you for listening. Love, Alison - yann, A sensitive soul like yours will always hear the song of spring. It's good to share it with you. A - Paul, Yep, they are a poopin' buncha geese. Lucky for me, they only stay for a bit before heading out to remote areas to nest. A - Steaven, Heard by a talented conductor - thank you. Alison - brneyed, This is a villanelle and I wrote it as an assignment for the Poetry Workshop. I am really working on this form of poetry because when it is done right - it captures me. Thank you. A - still struggling with the form (grins) - Bill, Thank you for reading, and commenting. Happy spring - it's almost summer! Alison - Bobby, It's nice, huh. xoxoxo Alison - Thank you, lovely Sue. xoxoxo A - D Was it the pussywillow - laughing A - Karilea Thank you - we know who gets the credit on any growth that I have made lately. Love, A - BluesSerenade, With a name like that, I knew you would hear the music. Thank you. Alison - Thank you, dear Diana. You know that they are in tune in the souther latitudes and out of tune in the northern. Yep, that's true. I am a geographer - I know these things. I really do! --- grins Love, Alison - Rachael, Glad that I helped make your day a bit better. xoxoxo Z |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
Like walking through verdant woodlands, it's as though I can smell those beautiful flowers. A joy to read. Heart2Heart |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Alison, just listen very carefully to the northern ones again, and you will hear the tune. It is a form that needs a specialised ear to hear. I just wouldn't want them to feel hurt by what you said. They will know you don't mean any harm, but they will be hurt that when they are calling so beautifully to you that you don't appreciate the full quality of their honking. Smiles. Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
wonderful imagery! v. well done!! |
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Nancy Hardin Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 58Nevada, United States of America |
The music in this poem calls me back to my young years. We knew it was Autumn or Spring by the passing of the wild geese playing their lovely tunes! I enjoyed this very much and it puts me in the mood for Spring. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
How did I miss this one! One of your very best Alison. Just reminded me of some of the happier days in my youth. |
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