Open Poetry #45 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
it was always interesting reading there of our opposing black belt bible sky where your heyzues wore sandles strapless and my more proper jesus wore spats they both seemed to frequent the dens of sin since their ink was nearly identical matthew mark and lucy and joanne except mine said luckyjoan and the irish yours took the souls to heaven on sunday's mine took them to the game sometimes and bar-b-que behind the heaven inn after for greasy pills and fat dog heartburns but the caddy man didn't sort their cards when he slipped them from the cold stone griddle and boxed them for shippment to dirt cupboards down behind the row of oaks of green lawn where they all became worm dirt under crosses ______________ daark (warhouse series) for the tet crew of 68 |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Incredibly impressive, dear D.! With death the differences die, but it seems that the living never get it, as they continue to fight each other in wars where no one wins and tears continue to flow ... Thank you for this deep and insightful poem. Warhouse series promises to be of utmost significance. Love, Margherita |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Daark, You leave me just feeling quiet inside as I think of your words. You touch me. Thank you. Ali-san |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms mar I kind of hope the series is a short one but I imagine it will linger as long as love does. Thanks lady ___________ Ms ali-san. Just another thought fileted with a flashback knife. Thanks for the wave |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
OK, this one has me shaking my head in amazement. I do not know who you are as a writer, but my God, you CAN write! I am certain that you have heard that one before, but this poem just blew me away! Jan |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Jan, you smile me ms, humble thanks for your touch. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"where they all became worm dirt under crosses" ...this line is simply amazing... |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Dark Stranger, Everyone becomes dirt somewhere. I wonder if they still have Lenin hanging about? It's amazing how people care so much about empty shells. This is a wise poem. Bobby |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Steavenr, thanks my friend _______________ Bj, I hear Lenin and Elvis have a bait shop down on the Brazos...but who knows. Thanks guy |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you have to have lived it or been close to someone who has~~ (going through those pangs of the past with him now) as always M |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I sincerely hope you will do more of these. I enjoyed the truth of this. Excellent. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms MMs...thanks lady...as I remember, he never really left?? ______________ ms myst, there will be more I am sure, thanks lady |
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