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Open Poetry #45

Sunshine Part DEUX.

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-12-12 01:27 AM

not with words
but I saw it there
saw that poetry written in your eyes.
I wasn't old enough,
wasn't rich enough,
just plain not enough.

I laughed at you then,
made you cry.

I fell backwards inside of that tree
and gave everything I had,
made it light up ten thousand colors.
Every vein of every leaf
glowing red hot fire
sunshine filled up that tree

sunshine that you passed by
and never even noticed.

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Bad Habits.

Not my best work, but it's my work. And that's something, I guess.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2009-12-12 02:58 AM

I like your work just fine. I do.

A

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2009-12-13 05:25 PM

I like your work also
and for someone it may be your best work
poetry is always open to the perception of the reader

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

3 posted 2009-12-14 12:34 PM

Alison, you're still a doll. I'll save up for that postage stamp. (read my reply in the other one if that makes absolutely no sense)

My lady, thanks very much. That is absolutely true. I get locked into this brain wavelength of "mind-blowing, and nothing less will do." Not every poem can be mind-blowing.

The real face-melters have to just come along every so often, or they wouldn't mean much, I reckon.

Love,

Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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