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Zeigeist
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0 posted 2009-12-10 01:31 PM



Alone With You

My eyes close
When it begins.
This old black and white film,
This worn cornered shoe box
Of memories.

My lips move in the dark,
To some old song.
My shoes move in
One more slow dance
With you

This squeaky chair
Holds me like a mother.

It floods
And fills
The void
While I

Remember.

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2009-12-10 02:34 PM


Very touching write.  Our memories run deeper than time.  Liked this
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2009-12-10 05:52 PM


Enjoyed...James
therightside
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3 posted 2009-12-11 12:51 PM


I very much enjoyed this! Truly touching... I think just about anyone can read this and instantly connect with it, thry're own 'someone' pops into their head, and the words become their own. It takes a great talent to be able to put into words what most of us are thinking. Nicely done.
Zeigeist
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4 posted 2009-12-11 05:38 PM


Thank you ThisDiamond, I am glad you like it.

Z.

Zeigeist
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5 posted 2009-12-11 05:39 PM


thanks James. for your reply

Z.

Zeigeist
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6 posted 2009-12-11 05:44 PM


Thank you for your kind praise rightside.

Z.

Mysteria
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7 posted 2009-12-11 10:37 PM


First of all, welcome to Passions, and I hope you will enjoy it here as much as some of long time members do.

I sure identified with your delightful first post.  There is nothing like sitting with a bunch of memories in a box that is for sure.

            
Happy Holidays
♥ Mysteria ♥

The Lady
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8 posted 2009-12-11 11:00 PM




poignant and very well done



Zeigeist
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9 posted 2009-12-12 02:03 PM


Mysteria, thank you for the welcome, and I am glad you identified with my poem. It is no secret that that is what most poets strive for.

Z.

Zeigeist
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10 posted 2009-12-12 02:04 PM


Thank you Lady, very nice to hear this morning

Z.

Laverne Pacquire
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11 posted 2009-12-16 08:06 PM


I like this poem..
I like the form..
The content isn't so bad.

I especially like the title.


please check out me blog of poetry:  poetryandwatertogo.blogspot.com


Sunshine
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12 posted 2009-12-16 11:19 PM


Welcome, welcome to Passions!

Please check your email
for a Very Special Welcome!

I look forward to hearing more
of your voice in the near future!




viking_metal
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13 posted 2009-12-17 02:51 AM


That happens lots.

To all of us, I think.


At least to me.
Here's to remembering,


Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

Marchmadness
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14 posted 2009-12-17 04:28 AM


Lovely poem, Z.
           Ida

Earth Angel
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15 posted 2009-12-17 04:27 PM


I put myself in that Rockwellian setting and I was flooded with my own nostalgic thoughts.

A lovely, reflective moment! Thank you!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel


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Margherita
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16 posted 2009-12-17 04:47 PM


Nice rendering of these serene moments of remembering.

Welcome to Pip, Zeitgeist.

Love,
Margherita

Zeigeist
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17 posted 2009-12-18 05:45 PM


Thank you all for your warm welcomes and hugs. I am overcome by the warmth of the people here at this site.

Zeitgeist

Klassy Lassy
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18 posted 2009-12-18 09:27 PM


I have boxes of old photos that I keep thinking I will organize for posterity.  Every time I get close to them, I experience the flooding, too.   This is a beautifully emotive write, and someday, I hope someone will remember me, with an old love song on their lips and a dance held in his heart.

Karen

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19 posted 2010-01-02 07:42 PM


This poem is poignant and very beautiful.

Welcome to PiP and happy new year.
Alison

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