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Alone With You
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Alone With You |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan 
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Alone With You My eyes close When it begins. This old black and white film, This worn cornered shoe box Of memories. My lips move in the dark, To some old song. My shoes move in One more slow dance With you This squeaky chair Holds me like a mother. It floods And fills The void While I Remember. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very touching write. Our memories run deeper than time. Liked this |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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therightside Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 64USA |
I very much enjoyed this! Truly touching... I think just about anyone can read this and instantly connect with it, thry're own 'someone' pops into their head, and the words become their own. It takes a great talent to be able to put into words what most of us are thinking. Nicely done. |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Thank you ThisDiamond, I am glad you like it. Z. |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
thanks James. for your reply Z. |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Thank you for your kind praise rightside. Z. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
First of all, welcome to Passions, and I hope you will enjoy it here as much as some of long time members do. I sure identified with your delightful first post. There is nothing like sitting with a bunch of memories in a box that is for sure. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
poignant and very well done |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Mysteria, thank you for the welcome, and I am glad you identified with my poem. It is no secret that that is what most poets strive for. Z. |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Thank you Lady, very nice to hear this morning  Z. |
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Laverne Pacquire Member
since 2009-11-15
Posts 96 |
I like this poem.. I like the form.. The content isn't so bad. I especially like the title. please check out me blog of poetry: poetryandwatertogo.blogspot.com |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome, welcome to Passions! Please check your email for a Very Special Welcome! I look forward to hearing more of your voice in the near future! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
That happens lots. To all of us, I think. At least to me. Here's to remembering, Paul Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely poem, Z. Ida |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I put myself in that Rockwellian setting and I was flooded with my own nostalgic thoughts. A lovely, reflective moment! Thank you!  Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  www.lindadowd.com |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Nice rendering of these serene moments of remembering. Welcome to Pip, Zeitgeist. Love, Margherita |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Thank you all for your warm welcomes and hugs. I am overcome by the warmth of the people here at this site. Zeitgeist |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I have boxes of old photos that I keep thinking I will organize for posterity. Every time I get close to them, I experience the flooding, too. This is a beautifully emotive write, and someday, I hope someone will remember me, with an old love song on their lips and a dance held in his heart. Karen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This poem is poignant and very beautiful. Welcome to PiP and happy new year. Alison |
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