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A Time To Say Goodbye
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A Time To Say Goodbye |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
To each of us there comes a time when an action becomes right: a time of birth, a time of death, of sadness, or delight. The clarion call to fall in love, the urge to change direction: a time for each choice to be made as we strive for perfection. For me the hardest time of all, no matter how I try, is when the clock is still, and it is time to say goodbye. "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Jim, I happened to read your profoundly touching poem while listening to this infinitely peaceful sound: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bk6q0zxa4xQ So I savored every word and the sadness of "goodbye" transformed into peaceful acceptance. Exceptional work! quote: ... things change from one moment to the next and it is beautiful to be in the flow. Love, Margherita |
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Poetal Member
since 2009-11-09
Posts 74Texas, United States |
What a perfect poem written with great wisdom that all persons can benefit by. It was beautifully written in perfect meter with great rhythm and rhyme. Compact to the point. Really fine job.  Thanks for the great read. AL Inmon |
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Kosmic888 Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 29Vancouver Canada |
Very nice rhythm to this piece, and it does evoke imagery and simile. Question: Would you consider begin the piece with middle stanza, followed by the first and leave the last intact? Just a thought... Peace - Ron |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You didn't mean this literally by saying good bye to us here, I hope, dear Jim. Take your time, but come back, please! You are a precious and wonderful Poet and your presence here is highly appreciated. Love, Margherita |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
... turn, turn, turn ... Sorry, you being the AncientHippie and all, I just couldn't resist! Anyways, I thought your poem was very sentimental and I really enjoyed reading it. God bless, -Bob |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A myriad of sayings streamed through my mind as I read your contemplative thoughts. To paraphrase a couple ~ ~ Parting is sweet sorrow. ~ All good things must come to an end. Ancient Cool One, you are a fine writer with a fine mind.  Like Margherita, I also hope that this is not a swan song to your fellow pipsters.   EA |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Dear Margherita: This piece was certainly not a swan song...this AncientHippie is much too young for that! Had to take some time off creating and sharing to ready my home "Greyhavens" for the approaching winter. And, yes, being in the Flow is, for me, the only time to be. Poet Al: Thank you very much for your kind comments. Kosmic: Good suggestions. Upon thinking it over, it seems to me that the original intention of (general view) followed by (specific examples) ending with (the Hook summary) would disrupt my envisioned aesthetic. LH Bob: The Byrds were one of my favourite bands back in the day, and, although I am neither Christian nor Jewish, the sentiments of Ecclesiastes 3: 1-8 are both good Truth, and fine poetry. Thank you for your kind words. Earth Angel: So glad you have found my thoughts contemplative: I could strive for no more. Thanks so much. Namaste All Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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